The rapid development of science and technology has brought us various new inventions that afford us entertainment and pleasure, among which cell phones, online games and social networking Website may be several of the most representatives. There is no denying that these inventions have posed a threat to educating children. Consequently, educating kids is more challenging today than it was in the past because of increasing time spent on these stuffs.
For one thing, a large number of on-line games and social websites are initially accompanied by something improper, such as violence, sex and so on, which threatens children’s mental health, thus making it harder for their parents to educate them. It is well known that environment are able to reshape the outlook of people, especially the innocent kids. Last week when I chatted on the phone with a high school student of mine, who is currently living in Canada, he mentioned that two months ago, as he memorized quite clearly, a nineteen-year-old boy on his campus committed a bloody murder by imitating the plots from “Warcraft 3”. What a lesson we can learn from the tragedy! Were it not for the online game he played, he could have grown up in to a well-behaved adult. In addition, according to an online survey conducted by the China Daily, more than 70% of the parents admit that their children get into at least three bad habits since their kids started wasting time in online games.
For another, children can find themselves harder to concentrate their minds after long-time chatting on cell phone or social website. Physiologically, children are more prone to get detracted than adults due to their less developed brain nerve cells. How can these children acquire any knowledge if they do not even pay attention to about what teachers are talking? Obama, one of the greatest presidents in American history, used to be a drunkard when he was young. At that time, he was addicted to the social website and enjoyed chatting with beautiful women. Not a second time was saved for reviewing his textbook and preparing the final exams As a result, he failed all the tests and was on the verge of dropping out of school. It was the social website and cell phone that prevented him from good education. Fortunately, one of his teachers helped him in getting rid of social website and Obama was back on his feet again. Years later, he succeed and was awarded the Nobel Prize for peace.
To conclude, modern technologies and innovations like cell phone and online games turn out to be detrimental to the education of children. Therefore, it is more difficult to educate people today than it was in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...pent on these stuffs. For one thing, a large number of on-line games and social websites are i...
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Line 5, column 944, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...back on his feet again. Years later, he succeed and was awarded the Nobel Prize for pea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, at least, in addition, such as, as a result, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93818984547 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79391721821 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578366445916 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5798548029 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.736842105 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8421052632 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279234479139 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900849895432 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733297585765 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198144430945 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683125188322 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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