In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer?
Technology, also known as the science of craft has been today become an indispensable part of the modern life, appeared in every corner of man life. In the education sector, technology also has been bringing a huge change and new face. The modern education offers us attractive choices of studying at home, television, online training, etc. I, however, still prefer the studying method at traditional schools in which have given me unique opportunities and played an irreplaceable role that no other choices could do.
Firstly, there are numerous reasons that I still stick with this old option which seem bit conservative; nonetheless, hundreds of years passed, studying at the traditional school has still been the most effective way offering such important and positive qualities that a human being should have as integrity, bravery, modesty, tolerance, etc. Nowhere offers the student better than this. From elementary school level, children are taught to concede or tolerate to friends.
Secondly, in the modern life, communication technique is one of the crucial skills for any of a successor. Studying at the traditional school does offer you this through real activities with direct contacts and face to face through group working or class attendance. It also provides you other such important skills as teamwork, leadership, time management, etc. In addition, while joining this, you will be able to learn how to understand yourself and ability through teachers’ comments and friends’ assistance. This is also the best place to enhance your personal competencies, promote your strength and overcome weakness.
While studying at traditional schools, we of course still can take the advantage of using technology at school: computer, project, multimedia, etc. are very useful tools for studying at class or exercises at home. For children today, it is really special and has become one of the most useful ways to decrease some popular modern life’s symptoms: autism, virtual life abuse of social networks such as Facebook, games, YouTube, etc.
To sum up, studying at traditional schools is much and much better than studying at home. No way to deny the advantage that it has.
Comments
I read your essays and
I read your essays and realized that you have a lot of grammatical errors.
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Thanks for your comments. Can you please a bit more details?. Your comments would facilitate my essay a lot!
I can only give you one
I can only give you one example. Look at this sentence:
Technology, also known as the science of craft has been today become an indispensable part of the modern life, appeared in every corner of man life
correct:
Technology, also known as the science of craft that (or which) has become an indispensable part of the modern life today, appears in every corner of man's life. //you will need to check books why we need that (or which) here
Thanks a lot. I will overview
Thanks a lot. I will overview the essay again. ^^
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ught to concede or tolerate to friends. Secondly, in the modern life, communicat...
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Line 7, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s such as Facebook, games, YouTube, etc. To sum up, studying at traditional schoo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, in addition, of course, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3591954023 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84165473826 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597701149425 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0723594432 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.705882353 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351255821622 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107534985032 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113967862259 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203598921699 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719401776167 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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