If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
When it comes to the issue what is famous people that you want to meet? People surely give different answer to this question, and every of them have certain reasons for their selection. As far as I am concerned, I like to meet Mohammad Ali Kelii, who was the most famous boxer of all time. The main reasons are that he has huge impacts on juveniles. Moreover, he expanded Islam in modern country as well as he was a great symbol of peace
First and the most important reasons is that Mohammad Ali can be a good role model for youths to improve their characters and pay more attention on what is happened their surrounding. I think that synopsis of his biography can give some light on this matter. At the age of twelve, he discovered his talent for boxing through and odd twists of fate. When his bike was stolen, he told a young officer, Joe Martin, that hen wants to beat out thief. “Well, you better to learn how to fight before you start challenging people” Martin reportedly told him. After this event, Martin trained young boxer, and soon he was being a great athlete in this sport. Although, being a great boxer was an ambitious for this teenager, he strongly believed that someday he could fulfill this dream.
A further point we must consider is that Mohammad Ali had a great role to expand Islam in developed Western country, especially America. When he was at the acme of the fame, he decided to change their religious from Christianity to Islam, which was a supervising for his fans. At that time people had not a proper imagine of this religious, while Mohammad Ali’s behavior, which based on the teaching of Islam, convince people to reconsider their opinions.
Apart from point I made above, his attempt for stop the war makes him a great symbol of peace. As we all know, we are living in a violence-rich environment, so that every day we are witnessing a war is initiated in a corner of the world. Hence, we have needs that famous people use of their reputation to convince politicians and public beliefs to stop wars. Unfortunately, most of them are passive in this subject. However, Mohammad Ali was one who refuted to serve in military service and going to the Vietnam War. Although, this decision had many negative consequences for him like ban from boxing, he did not change it. Hence, he showed people that they should take the correct decision even though it was difficult.
All above evidence supports this undeniable face that Mohammad Ali is a best selection for meeting. His biography can encourage young people to improve their selves. His efforts showed that a correct face of Islam. In addition, his sacrifice saves plenty of lives across the world, by stop the war. Last but not least, I hope that people gain the deeper insight of war and its consequences.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244206773619 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.149732620321 0.158761421928 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.078431372549 0.0866891130778 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0338680926916 0.046263068375 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0891265597148 0.0685040099705 130% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.117647058824 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0196078431373 0.0351676179071 56% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53380171388 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030303030303 0.0309702414327 98% => OK
Particles: 0.0017825311943 0.00188951952338 94% => OK
Determiners: 0.0891265597148 0.0887237588012 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0106951871658 0.0209618222197 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0213903743316 0.0139019557991 154% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2816.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 494.0 408.028673835 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7004048583 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323886639676 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214574898785 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.147773279352 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0931174089069 0.112833075102 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53380171388 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524291497976 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 62.6303921951 59.2087087015 106% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5933135063 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.307692308 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 40.4574898785 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.39869281046 1.45489161554 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168013045551 0.300154397459 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0800535463725 0.103427244359 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0715402758519 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.421535705375 0.497263757937 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0941067857933 0.151897553556 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598295270518 0.114077575197 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499054822454 0.0781384742642 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.357049951385 0.336927656856 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00835333578305 0.067059652881 12% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113350681031 0.210909579961 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465230842524 0.0618886996521 75% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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