If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete who would that be and why Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice

If I could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, I would choose Cristinao Ronaldo. The reason why is that I´m a great soccer fan I am from Portugal. I think he is a living legend for what he has done in the field and an example for future generation for is dedication, hard work and discipline. He is the living proof that hard work beats talent and that if one as a dream and is willing to fight for it, everything is possible. When Ronaldo first came to Sporting Lisbon, he was about 8 years old, and although he was an hard working talent, there were other kids that were seen as more promising than him. Those other kids came out to have little to none success and Ronaldo surpassed them without any comparison possible, due to his phenomenal achievements: 3 “Balon d or”, best international scorer in several years, all time top scorer of the “UEFA Champions league”. I could also include his team achievements, were he was premier league champion, la liga champion, UEFA Champions league champion, and Eurocup champion. Nowadays, he represents Portugal in the world, where many people, mainly outside of the euro zone, only know that Portugal exists because of him. Moreover, to the ones that recognize Portugal, he represents the excellence of Portuguese people to its finest. For these reasons that I wrote above, Ronaldo is definitely an inspiring athlete to meet.

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Average: 6.1 (11 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...efinitely an inspiring athlete to meet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1165.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 238.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89495798319 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79064040913 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651260504202 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4096738563 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0879338436836 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542608736807 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097342444204 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0879338436836 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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