It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Parents always have an important role in children's lives and if they can make a friendly relationship with them, children will follow their advice. In addition, each person has a specific talent and parents should help their children recognize their abilities and choose a great job for the future. Many parents hold this idea that children should choose jobs similar to their jobs. However, other parents think that children should have the freedom to choose a different job from their parent's job. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelming. Among the two opinions, I believe that children should chance to choose a different job from their parent's job. I explain my reasons in the following paragraphs to support my idea.
First and foremost, each person has a unique character and have children had the ability to identify their talents, parents would have allowed them to choose a different job from their job and encourage them to be successful in the future. For example, my friend who had educated parents that they worked in the university as professors. They wanted that she studied hard and choose their jobs. On the other hand, she had wonderful ability to write and she preferred to be a writer in the future. After a while, when her parents considered her talent, they accepted her desire and encouraged her to be successful in this job. As a result, it is necessary that parents help their children to find their abilities and provide a good condition for them to achieve their goals in the future.
In addition, there is another reason that deserves some words here. The condition of each job may change during times. In other words, some jobs will lose their value in the future while today people who work in these jobs have a great position. For instance, my uncle had a factory a few years ago and he earned a lot of money and he satisfied so that he preferred that his son worked in this factory with him. Now he does not have a good condition because of many factors that impact on the economic condition of the country. Thus, he is happy that his son chooses another job different from him. So successful is his business that he identifies his talents and pays attention to various conditions of the country.
To sum up, what I have discussed above, I safely come to this conclusion that parents should help their children to choose a different job from them and I insist that children should have the freedom to find their talents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: WANT_THAT_I[4]
Message: Did you mean 'wanted her to'?
Suggestion: wanted her to
...d in the university as professors. They wanted that she studied hard and choose their jobs. On ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77829099307 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48972735982 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441108545035 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2946621737 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5238095238 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.619047619 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4913059209 0.236089414692 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177035143173 0.076458572812 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172924815586 0.0737576698707 234% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336601071481 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133784738186 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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