It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Nowadays, in the world a lot of events are happening and plenty of them never affect our daily life. The news reporters and journalists effort to show these events vital, but is it important to people to know about these events happening around the world or not? I rather disagree with the statement.
First, today people are busy and they have no time to spend their little time for knowing all or even part of events of the world. The amount of these events are huge and lots of them are not important to people. In the modern life people have to work hard to providing the requirements of their life and they are not able to waste their free time to knowing about news of the world. For example in my country the most important thing for persons in the life is preparing a good life for their family and spending time with family or friends. Thus, it is not important to people to know about events happening in the world.
Second, the most of news around the world are about bad events such as wars, natural disasters, accidents, conflicts of countries and political issues and they make life boring and tragic. It might be true that people can get a lot of experiences and be aware with watching these news but the events of the world is not usefulness for people and that is only gathering massive amount of information which are contain bad and painful news. Knowing these news only makes people sad and depress so there is no importance for hearing them. In this complex life people are not interested in the news and the time of parade of newspapers passed over. People do not trust to news resources and sites and this is another reason that people think knowing about events happening around the world is not important for them.
To put it in a nutshell, people now are aware which things have benefit for them and they learned to live super-efficient to having a good and pleasure life knowing about news of the world is not preference to them. Touchable events could be more important for people not knowing about them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 275, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
... experiences and be aware with watching these news but the events of the world is not usef...
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Line 6, column 410, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'contained'.
Suggestion: contained
...massive amount of information which are contain bad and painful news. Knowing these new...
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Line 6, column 448, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...e contain bad and painful news. Knowing these news only makes people sad and depress so th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58583106267 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30352747256 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41416893733 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.743477354 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.2 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4666666667 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366313917543 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162853623779 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106441570086 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272853806137 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768436232957 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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