The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
do you agree or disagree?
The question is whether the young usually consider to celebrities' opinions more than older people or not. Everyone with regard to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this issue; however, I am inclined to affirm the validity of the mentioned statement because the young people are looking for the world which is adequate with their needed and dreams; hence, famous people can lead them to their desires. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point:
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that humans' spirit has a great tendency to reputation. Every young person wishes that he could have been observed in TV or set on the first page of magazines; hence, the curious generation continually pursues well-known people's life and advice. Even more, youths conceive renowned human beings as an idol. To elucidate, take my own experience. When I was a teenager, I was admiring a famous singer. My all money was spent for purchasing the new papers or his albums and totally his effects on my life were unbelievable. I was attempting to imitate and execute all of his experiences and advices for achieving to his status. As a result, the dream of fame causes the young to rely on the famous people.
The second reason for my argument lies the reality that older people around us belong to past era particularly the periods of time that technology or other advanced points had not been invented; therefore, there is a wrong conviction among youth that the old are not able to assist us in achieving prosperity due to lack of aware from modern society. Besides, one should notice that nowadays, the occurred changes in communities have caused people's personality to alter. I mean, the overwhelming majority of youths would like to acquire the peaks of success and wealth in just one night. There is a proverb in my country among old people that says "youth's mind is into their eyes", I mean the famous people's lavishly life makes ordinary people attract toward itself; subsequently, trusting on their ideas and opinions seems more logical for the young people.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that I strongly believe that the young people prefer to accept the well-known humans because the dream of fame is stifling them and older people's experiences is impractical in their view.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, i feel, i mean, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93827160494 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58506373009 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.7489305138 48.9658058833 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.333333333 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140782842586 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499428842451 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574930713732 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0879767070082 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258051359559 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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