In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Young children will have an important role in the future and it is necessary that they learn different things at young ages. Many people deem that children should learn how to manage their own money. However, other people hold the opposite view and they believe that it is not helpful for them in this age. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelming. Among the two opinions, I agree with the former one more. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this opinion.
First and foremost, childhood is a good age to learn different things and if children learn to manage their money, their parents can trust them and do not be worry because of various things, In addition, it helps them to improve their confidence. For example, when I went to the school, my parents gave me a few money and I had to manage money for a week. I should know about the price of everything which I need them and it enabled me to connect with people who sold different things. Therefore, I have learned a lot of things about buying and increase my confidence to connect different people.
Second, there is another reason that deserves some words here. Children in this age should learn about responsibility and know this fact that they will be responsible for their decisions so that it help them to make decisions carefully. For this reason, manage the money is a good experience for them to improve their responsibility and solve their problems themselves. For instance, when I was a child, I did not pay attention to important things and one day, my parents gave me a little money and asked to buy a milk. When I came back home, my mother understood that this milk ha a problem and she told me I had to buy another milk with my money.
To wrap it up, from what I discussed above, I safely come to the conclusion that children should learn to manage their money. Not only can it help them to improve their responsibility but also increase their confidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ent to the school, my parents gave me a few money and I had to manage money for a w...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun money seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little money'.
Suggestion: little money
...ent to the school, my parents gave me a few money and I had to manage money for a week. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6546961326 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61826725199 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480662983425 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.526947466 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1176470588 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316381881388 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106713824579 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109916190449 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22116265799 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345415702219 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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