People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work?
Although earning money is vital to maintain a decent standard of living, it is not the sole reason why people go to work every day. From my perspective, there are two additional reasons for holding jobs. First, working makes us feel that our life is meaningful. Secondly, being employed gives us the chance to interact with people outside our normal social circle.
To begin with, having jobs offers us a sense of purpose in life. Striving to fulfill the objectives of our job, we feel that our life is purposeful. Also, being employed makes us self-confident and helps us to set long-term goals about what we want to accomplish. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I used to be unemployed for three months, which made me feel depressed and worthless. But after I found a job as a marketer, my life changed totally. To be specific, since then I struggle every day to reach the profit objectives of the company and increase my sales record. Achieving these goals, gives me a sense of self-satisfaction.
Furthermore, jobs provide us with the opportunity to meet new people on a regular basis and socialize. On the contrary, people who are unemployed interact mostly with their family and pre-existed friends, which can sometimes be boring. For instance, when I was in high school, I worked in a local bookstore. Despite earning little money, I was satisfied with my job because I could chat with people from different backgrounds and learn about their lives. If I had not worked there, I would not have had a chance to improve my social skills before entering college.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that except for making money, there are two underlying reasons why people work. First, jobs make people endeavor to achieve challenging goals and that experience a meaningful and productive life. Secondly, working gives them the opportunity to communicate with people outside their usual social circle and expand their social networks.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, except for, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97256097561 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81010746607 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567073170732 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4303839594 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.55 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22646811687 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675141521315 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073212482095 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166553226801 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093475687846 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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