Should kids allowed to play computer games?

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Should kids allowed to play computer games?

Whenever it comes to issue that whether playing computer game is waste of time or not, there is no short discussion and argument about it. As far as I concerned, I am hundred percent argee with the statement that they should not play games. Even though there stand hundreds of reasons behind my preference, I would only explore essential three statement here.
First of all, nowadays computer games are becoming more addective which means children will spend more time and play long hours to win the game. This is an obvious that it will effect their mentalaty. For example, I watch an famous video of kid who is addicted in game and when her mother tried to stop he get angry and try to suicide himself. This example showing that it is worse than physical disease.
Secondly, young age is the right time to study and get good habit of learning but if they spend time playing they can not concentrate on their classes. Especially children concentration is lower that adult which means they easily distracted. If they spend more time playing there will be dangerous effect in their future life. For instance, children who did not learn learning habit cannot study in college or university which means they carees wil be lower than others.
Finally, We all know that the effect of computer and electronic devise is hazardous in our health. It will be more dangerous in kids health both physically and mentally. So to save their health we should not let kids play computer. I have an great example of my nephew when he was just two years old he play computer game almost half of the day. His parents let him play computer because hi cried all day and if he play computer he stop crying. And when he got 5 years old his vision get worse to -3.
In conclusion, when it comes to the issue whether allow my children to play computer games, i would defenitely say no because of these sorrowful examples and statements.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...e game. This is an obvious that it will effect their mentalaty. For example, I watch a...
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Line 2, column 222, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...t their mentalaty. For example, I watch an famous video of kid who is addicted in ...
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Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ult which means they easily distracted. If they spend more time playing there will...
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Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to learn'.
Suggestion: to learn
...or instance, children who did not learn learning habit cannot study in college or univer...
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Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ould not let kids play computer. I have an great example of my nephew when he was ...
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Line 4, column 303, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'plays'.
Suggestion: plays
...ephew when he was just two years old he play computer game almost half of the day. H...
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Suggestion: plays
...uter because hi cried all day and if he play computer he stop crying. And when he g...
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... because hi cried all day and if he play computer he stop crying. And when he got...
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Line 4, column 433, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'stops'.
Suggestion: stops
...ied all day and if he play computer he stop crying. And when he got 5 years old his...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...low my children to play computer games, i would defenitely say no because of thes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63235294118 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37571879489 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547058823529 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6308231108 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334506625517 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918458186694 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835434059977 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173988423047 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793248422289 0.0645574589148 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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