Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Today, because of being different issues the parents have no much time to be with their children, and unfortunately these provides some serious problems for both parents and children. Although some individuals prefer to work on school lessons with children during the rest time, I much prefer to spend time by playing sports, have attractive fun time and so forth.

First of all, children need some time to be far away from the studying and anything is related to the school. They spend much of their daily time in school, library and classroom, so they are tired automatically, then they must have several entertainment instruments such as soccer ball, tennis racket. Researches show that the best way in order to make the children far from school tiring time is parents spending with them. For example, when I was a intermediate student, after coming back from school to home, I had some special time with my parents by playing sports, telling jokes and other entertainments activities. Hence, all of those activities helped me to forget my hard studying time.

In addition, this process help students to be more creative. Children, during the playing and fun time, face with some issues, but by doing some specific works which help them to find different innovation paths to solve problems, create some new ways to achieve the goals and other things. Today, in the technology age, the experts always suggest not only to parents, but also to teachers that play with children, because the researchers have discovered the children can find their attractive and creativity abilities exactly during the play and fun time not in the tiring and forcing time.

In summary, although maybe work on the schoolwork help children to achieve higher mark in their lessons, these provide some negative effects for them and even may not solve in the future. Who can ignore such reasons, as making tiring far away and find the abilities?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...being different issues the parents have no much time to be with their children, an...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ding with them. For example, when I was a intermediate student, after coming back...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
... but by doing some specific works which help them to find different innovation paths to solve pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, then, for example, in addition, in summary, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00621118012 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51798055424 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546583850932 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.6342965773 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.333333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373742468994 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139510548542 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920064393717 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226999858848 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111612685515 0.0645574589148 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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