Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?

From a broad perspective, in the current states of affairs we face, in which so busy becomes parents with their job in today's world that rarely do they find sufficient time to spend with their children. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that they should allocate this time to the best efficient way. However, whether playing with them is better choice rather than assisting them with teir homeworks depends on the lens through which one is looking. There is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that sparing time with children to provide more fun for them has a variety of advantages for kids. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph, the ratinale behind this opinion will be further elaborated.
First and most exquisite point coming the mind to substantitate my standpoints ia concerned with the rather well-developed education system in modern societies. Hardly can anyone deny the fact that this inadequet time is prevailing in modern soceties which represent multiplie obstacles for people. Therefore, regardless of these challeneges, there are some postitive facets either. Indeed, having worked hard, these individulas incline to open up best ppossible facilities for the cities in which they live. Undoubtdly, advance ducation system is an integral part of these faciltiies that has undertaken the reposnisbilites of overwhelming majority section of children's education. Families are witnesses the students that do not have any assignement at home. The knwoledgeable lecturers assist the student in a professional manner that make them needless to get help from their parents. In this cirsumstance, apparently, parents are able to assgin enough time to play and have fin with their kids since they no longer become apprehensive regarding their schoolworks.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is the children's need to fulfull their natural requirements. Needless to say that each stage of life has its own particular needs. In the childhood it is imparative to have sufficient physical acitivities. Moreover, the fundamnetal characteristics of a person are built in this period of time, and it is of the utmost important for children that do not concentrat on mere one aspect of their life. According to the latest research attributing to Dr. Kevin rude, a prominent professor in the Department of Pshycology at the University of Macquarie, 80% of the suprelative students become one-dimensional people in the future since they can notexpress themsleves through other way rather than too much working or studying. This probe corroborates further legitimact of this idea that if parents allocated too much attention to their child's school things, they would hinder their kids progress in various fileds.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that parents ought to pay enought attention to their children playing. Not only do not today's kids require too much time for their academic issues, but also their personlaities' growth is highly dependent on being involved in a myraid activities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 807, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional manner" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...oledgeable lecturers assist the student in a professional manner that make them needless to get help fro...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...teristics of a person are built in this period of time, and it is of the utmost important for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95145789514 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577551020408 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7205124726 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.333333333 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262105652379 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729278092507 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571135795567 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164550306525 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387531555446 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 86.8835125448 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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