Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Computers are a great technological advance. They save people`s time and let access a huge amount of information. On the other hand, the computer technology creates a lot of problems for humans. Personally, I think that computers make life complicated. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, computers cause health problems. These days, a lot of people work in offices. All day long at work, the office clerks are sitting on their chairs and are staring at the computers screens. They do not move enough to maintain their health. When people are not physically active, they are at risk of gaining weight. Obesity, in turn, can lead to serious diseases such as diabetes. A treatment of diabetes is quite expensive. If people did not spend money on the medication to cure the illness, consequences could be terrible. Complications of diabetes are horrible -some people lose their extremities, others struggle with kidneys insufficiency, which can make life miserable. To that end, computers are a threat to people`s well-being.
Secondly, because of the computers, a myriad of people has lost their jobs. In the second part of the twentieth century, the sudden proliferation of computers in the humans` life has resulted in a modernization of the majority of industries. Nowadays, factories prefer to use machines operated by computers, rather than a hand labor. As a result, professionals such as carpenters and welders who used to work in the factories are not demanded as employees anymore since the machines have been performing their work. If people lose their jobs and are not able to support their families, their lives will become tremendously difficult. Although the computerization has created new professions such as software engineers and programmers, the lion share of people who used to work with their hands have been suffering from unemployment.
To conclude, I think that the invention of computers has been having a negative effect on the mankind. This is because the computers cause ailments and create unemployment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...cause ailments and create unemployment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22155688623 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07245736553 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574850299401 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1644338718 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8260869565 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5217391304 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219251770123 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618344137078 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378063880111 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137882237139 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167307662049 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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