some people say that Internet provides people with a lot of information, while others think that access to so much information creates problems
The 20th century has been considered as the information and technology development era. Nowadays, the lifestyle, as it is commonly sensed, has been affected by the galloping rate of technology arrival offering a more convenient life in an excellent fashion. Internet is truly one of the greatest outcomes of technology advancement, which has made significant changes in people's lives. Some people share the view that Internet gives one a chance to freely access a great deal of precious data; however, others would think that providing numerous information causes problems for general public. I, personally, subscribe to the view that preparing plenty of information brings about great benefit to mankind for several reasons, three substantial of which are elaborate upon hereunder.
to begin with, previously, people were totally depending on books, and if they want to survey an issue, they need to search among libraries books in order to find proper books, which was often time consuming and boring; additionally, extracted information might be inconvenient, outdated, and even misleading, but today, by touching a button, one can get a consider amount of first-handed information available. As a point in view, when I was in university, whenever I had an academic problem, what I was doing was going to the library and surfing on the net, thus I could managed to find what I was looking for rapidly.
Another interpretation regarding the merits of accessing indefinite knowledge lies in the fact that people are the main wealth of a successful society; or, to put in another word, the more individuals of a country are qualified, the more the country is powerful. In this regard, knowledge plays a vital role in preparing one for the future, which triggers mental age and efficient human resource competency. As a result, accessing information expands one's general information, which aids a community in being more mentally healthy in general and enhancing one’s self-confidence in particular.
Last but not least, in today's modern world, every company has to be in rush so as to not to left behind in contending for the "field of competition". Innovation enjoys a particular importance in achieving competitive advantage and more market share. Getting access to excessive amount of data gives one a better understanding regarding points, which stimulates employees’ motivation to innovate and bringing them about consistent competitive advantage and thus fortune.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I do concur with the view that although Internet might produce troubles for individuals, especially young people and children, the merits of it outweigh the demerits of that due to the fact that it provides up-to-date information, increases corporations’ productivity and efficiency, and improves social mental health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...arrival offering a more convenient life in an excellent fashion. Internet is truly one of the greatest ...
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Line 1, column 578, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...umerous information causes problems for general public. I, personally, subscribe to the view t...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...of which are elaborate upon hereunder. to begin with, previously, people were tot...
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Line 2, column 35, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...der. to begin with, previously, people were totally depending on books, and if they want to survey an...
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Line 2, column 356, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...oday, by touching a button, one can get a consider amount of first-handed information avai...
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Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'manage'
Suggestion: manage
...ry and surfing on the net, thus I could managed to find what I was looking for rapidly....
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Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... world, every company has to be in rush so as to not to left behind in contending for th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'regarding', 'so', 'thus', 'as to', 'in general', 'in particular', 'in summary', 'as a result', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228628230616 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.163021868787 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111332007952 0.0866891130778 128% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0417495029821 0.046263068375 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0258449304175 0.0685040099705 38% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119284294235 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0675944333996 0.0351676179071 192% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.11926946561 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0318091451292 0.0309702414327 103% => OK
Particles: 0.00198807157058 0.00188951952338 105% => OK
Determiners: 0.0874751491054 0.0887237588012 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00994035785288 0.0209618222197 47% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0198807157058 0.0139019557991 143% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2879.0 2387.08602151 121% => OK
No of words: 447.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.44071588367 5.86048508987 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.434004474273 0.338922669872 128% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.34451901566 0.251872472559 137% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.268456375839 0.174417080927 154% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.192393736018 0.112833075102 171% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11926946561 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590604026846 0.524397521467 113% => OK
Word variations: 73.7280482473 59.2087087015 125% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 31.9285714286 20.5533526081 155% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.1500426287 48.84282405 195% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 205.642857143 120.699889404 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9285714286 20.5533526081 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 66.3804729946 45.7405998639 145% => OK
Elegance: 1.80172413793 1.45489161554 124% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236032219423 0.300154397459 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122776829599 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0505300708668 0.0752933317313 67% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.600448228829 0.497263757937 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150240933736 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979258195965 0.114077575197 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096425257249 0.0781384742642 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.233612786234 0.336927656856 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0348712391145 0.067059652881 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152203164237 0.210909579961 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660732401371 0.0618886996521 107% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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