Some people say that Money makes that world go round others say that money is the root of all evil Which of these do you agree with Use examples and details in your answer

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Some people say that Money makes that world go round, others say that money is the root of all evil. Which of these do you agree with? Use examples and details in your answer.

Before and today, at all times, it was difficult to survive and live satisfactory life without money. Personally, I think that money make the world go round. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
One of the reasons is that money facilitate to progress. It is in humans` nature to compete with each other in order to gain self confidence and become meaningful for themselves and for public. In the most cases, the person who has more money is considered more successful and recognized by others. Therefore, this pushes people to make money to excel. If the person is willing to be conspicuous in the society, he is trying to elaborate or invent something new and unusual. This is turn, contributes to the world`s progress and development. Despite of opinion that money is the reason of myriads of conflicts, they make people to think wider and craft new inventions. To that end, money is indispensable force of humans` intellectual evolution.
Another reason is that desire to enjoy life by participating in favorite activities makes humans to work and earn money. Different people have different interests in life. Someone, for instance, likes diving and if he lives somewhere in the north states of the United States, he has to fly to warmer states to dive into the ocean. Others, for example, like to travel all around the world, which is very problematically to fulfill without expenses. This kind of activities are quite costly and request having a job and making money. Although some of the people`s hobby could be done without spending, most of them are not cheep. So, having money lets dreams come true for the people and that way enables them to feel happy.
To sum it up, I feel that money rotate the world. This is because they contribute to the evolution of the humans` minds and make people`s life more collorful and pleasant. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that money are crucial element of humans` life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...having a job and making money. Although some of the people's hobby could be done witho...
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...crucial element of humans' life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93134328358 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82723917531 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549253731343 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9115491587 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6666666667 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9523809524 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231009936759 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790836865556 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621183467568 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156174532489 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236204823038 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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