Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?

We all feel pity when we see beggars requesting spare change on the streets. In my opinion, however, it is incorrect to give in to these feelings and supply these people with money. Ultimately, the cash could be better used for other purposes.

In the first place, the money given to beggars can be better spent on other charities. For example, five dollars may purchase a slice of pizza in a developed country. In the developing world, however, that same five dollars could purchase life-saving products, such as nets to ward off malaria, or nutrients to aid starving children. Rather than giving money to local beggars, it would be more just to save spare change during the year, eventually donating all of it to the developing world. That is where it can do the maximum amount of good. It is random that some people are close neighbors and others live far away. We owe moral obligations to people everywhere, however, because we are all human beings. For this reason, it is wrong to prefer helping local beggars rather than distant, starving strangers. We should always spend our money where it does the most good to the most people.

At the same time, giving money to beggars can encourage bad practices. It is uncertain how the money might be used. For example, it might be used to purchase drugs or alcohol. These substances will not help the beggar to improve his or her position in life. Moreover, by giving beggars money, you are perhaps not really helping them in the long run. There is an old saying that you can feed a man for one day by giving him a fish, but you can feed him for a lifetime by teaching him to fish. The reason this is relevant is that it is better to encourage beggars to seek jobs rather than supporting their state of unemployment.

Of course, some beggars are unable to find work and need help in the short term. But it is impossible to tell the difference between people who sincerely need the money and those who will misuse it, or are uninterested in finding work. For this reason, it is better to allow social services and unemployment agencies to help the needy, and to spend excess money on charities in the developing world.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, for example, of course, such as, in my opinion, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62015503876 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43556466592 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521963824289 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.957452642 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2727272727 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5909090909 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232783651439 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680682300557 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391619526189 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1382247267 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275332901128 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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