some students prefer an open discussion classes, others prefer a lecture classes.. what do you prefer?
Education plays a significant part of people’s lives. It is important because it helps people to have a good job and live a better life. If the people’s opinions are going to be considered about an open discussion class and a class with a lecture, some would prefer an open discussion class; others would choose a class with a lecture. In my view, I believe that an open discussion class is much better that a class with a lecture for the following essential reasons.
First, an open discussion class helps students to comprehend a subject in a simple way. In fact, asking students questions about a particular topic, and involving them to think about the answer will make students to concentrate more. Consequently, the information will stuck in student’s minds. For example, a few years ago, I went to a pharmacy school. I had to take a pharamcology class in order to graduate. Frankly, whenever I attend the pharmacology class, I would have a difficulty understanding the medications mechanism of action as the professor used to read and explain a lecture by himself. After a while, I went to the professor and told him about my issue, so he decided to change his strategy by promote the students to participate in the class. Actually, whenever we have a new medication, he would start asking students questions about it and make them think about the answer even if it was wrong. As a result, the information started stuck in my mind and I can remeber the whole conversation in the class about a specific medication, which in turn make me understand and absorb the material easily and way better than the previous method.
Second, an open discussion class is fun and motivate students to learn more. As a matter of fact, engaging students into a conversation about a certain topic will make students alert and not bored in a class. As a result, they will compete with each other to give the right answer, which in turn will make a great studying atmosphere. For instance, when I was in high shool, my english teacher used to give us homework, which is reading a passage about a specific topic. When a class time comes, he would start asking us question about it. Indeed, that way helped us to study and prepare in advance in order to one of the teacher’s favorite students. In contrast, our chemistry teaher used to read a lecture about the atoms and the molecules in a class. Frankly, that made all the students sleepy and did not seem excited about the topic. As you can see how it is essential to consider an open discussion class.
In conslusion based on the aspects revealed above, I believe that open discussion classes are more substantial not only because it aids students learn faster and easier but also, motivate them and make them thrilled about education. So, I think all universities should consider this kind of classes.
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is much better that a class with a lecture
is much better than a class with a lecture
the information will stuck in student’s minds.
the information will be stuck in student’s minds.
are more substantial not only because it aids students learn faster and easier but also, motivate them and make them thrilled about education.
are more substantial because it aids students not only learn faster and easier but also motivate them and make them thrilled about education.
Sentence: Frankly, whenever I attend the pharmacology class, I would have a difficulty understanding the medications mechanism of action as the professor used to read and explain a lecture by himself.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to medications and mechanism
Sentence: After a while, I went to the professor and told him about my issue, so he decided to change his strategy by promote the students to participate in the class.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to by and promote
Sentence: Actually, whenever we have a new medication, he would start asking students questions about it and make them think about the answer even if it was wrong.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and questions
Sentence: I had to take a pharamcology class in order to graduate.
Error: pharamcology Suggestion: pharmacology
Sentence: As a result, the information started stuck in my mind and I can remeber the whole conversation in the class about a specific medication, which in turn make me understand and absorb the material easily and way better than the previous method.
Error: remeber Suggestion: remember
Sentence: For instance, when I was in high shool, my english teacher used to give us homework, which is reading a passage about a specific topic.
Error: shool Suggestion: shoot
Sentence: In contrast, our chemistry teaher used to read a lecture about the atoms and the molecules in a class.
Error: teaher Suggestion: teacher
Sentence: In conslusion based on the aspects revealed above, I believe that open discussion classes are more substantial not only because it aids students learn faster and easier but also, motivate them and make them thrilled about education.
Error: conslusion Suggestion: conclusion
flaws:
No. of Words: 496 while No. of Characters: No. of Different Words: 227 //the examples are too long.
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The pattern you used will not get a good mark. Try this pattern instead:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
An simple example (Eating at home or restaurant) for paragraph 2:
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence: Eating at home can save money) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences: I can prepare cheaper food from food market; I don't need to drive or take a bus to reach the restaurant; I don't need to pay tips...) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentence: for example, a sandwich can cost me $10 at restaurant, but it only cost me $5 at home.) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences: with the money I saved, I can buy a good book to read; I can use the money for a trip...).
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 496 350
No. of Characters: 2285 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.719 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.607 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.173 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.708 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.168 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a simple way" with adverb for "simple"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... helps students to comprehend a subject in a simple way. In fact, asking students questions abo...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'stick'
Suggestion: stick
...ore. Consequently, the information will stuck in student’s minds. For example, a few ...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'medications'' or 'medication's'?
Suggestion: medications'; medication's
...uld have a difficulty understanding the medications mechanism of action as the professor us...
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Line 5, column 840, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d did not seem excited about the topic. As you can see how it is essential to cons...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'frankly', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'as a matter of fact', 'as a result', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228675136116 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.157894736842 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.070780399274 0.0866891130778 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0308529945554 0.046263068375 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.070780399274 0.0685040099705 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116152450091 0.118717715034 98% => OK
Participles: 0.032667876588 0.0351676179071 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74555027379 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0344827586207 0.0309702414327 111% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.121597096189 0.0887237588012 137% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235934664247 0.0209618222197 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127041742287 0.0139019557991 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2854.0 2387.08602151 120% => OK
No of words: 496.0 408.028673835 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75403225806 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.332661290323 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.245967741935 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.183467741935 0.174417080927 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108870967742 0.112833075102 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74555027379 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471774193548 0.524397521467 90% => OK
Word variations: 54.320528199 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.6666666667 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5106386151 48.84282405 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.916666667 120.699889404 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.791666666667 0.644075263715 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 45.2634408602 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.45454545455 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125964741463 0.300154397459 42% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.111704655464 0.103427244359 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0757031297171 0.0752933317313 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.454117960082 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167387205561 0.151897553556 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464007130693 0.114077575197 41% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611769590724 0.0781384742642 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.39639260407 0.336927656856 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.170238006579 0.067059652881 254% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103941531305 0.210909579961 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546019752801 0.0618886996521 88% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
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Rates: 74.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 22.5 Out of 30