Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your own op

The modern society has controversial matters regarding living with parents or independently of them due to cultural and social peculiarities of the community. While developed western civilization cultivates freedom of the youngsters from parental control, most of some Asian try to keep their outlook on the long-term relationship with their ancestors. Considering the fact that I live in developing Central Asian country, I believe that despite the variety of troubles concealing in independent life, young people should live separately from their relatives in the age of their active university studentship or starting career.
To begin with, living with parents can be beneficial for young professionals, who have already graduated their alma mater or have started their career. For example, in my country, most of them cannot afford to buy expensive things like property or luxury vehicle for the reason that they have small salaries. Consequently, young individuals save money, distributing a part of the salary on the sharing house responsibilities with their parents. Acting as mature people, youngsters even can look after the elderly family members or cover the expenses of care. They learn priceless skills as caring and sharing. Yet, in some cases, the joint residence with parents may exacerbate the strained relationship between generations if they have had any disagreement before. Therefore, lads and lasses find shared accommodation with roommates more appropriate in such situations.
As far as I concern, young people usually tend to live separately from parents when they study at university. There are many advantages of independent lifestyle such as learning practical skills. A plethora of students (or non-students) start cooking the first time or become accustomed to being self-reliant by constructing their time-tables or counting expenses. Developing these skills are crucial in their youth to make teenagers mature and self-confident in adulthood. However, there are a few disadvantages which intimidate young people. The ambiguity of an independent life conceals lack of self-supportability and any sorts of support. A part of teenagers may feel uncomfortable because of their age-related immaturity because they are not able to deal with issues related to the responsibility for their own life. As a result, they drop out of the study or live pennilessly which evidently witness the deficiency of the close people encouragement in their life.
In conclusion, I consider that having an independent lodging (with no regard to rented or owned accommodation) is the vital factor for personality development. Although I had been unprepared to the adulthood in my student age, I used to live far distant from father and mother, whereas now being a mature adult I tend to sustain my elderly parents by providing them with a trustworthy life.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in some cases, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46952595937 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19059939254 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580135440181 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1189984555 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.15 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313540645102 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853227368147 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477176851217 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186973150694 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338604004114 0.0645574589148 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 10.002688172 165% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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