For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school
Success is the role key for a progress life in the future. Some people think that the relation between people is the way for success. People think that the better relations will help people to easily coordinate. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that the important of studying hard in school is the most important way to proceed for better success. The basis of my opinion is educational, social, and personal.
From the educational perspective, studying in school is the fastest way for future success. Students in school study hard, they know that their education will help them to be more successful. For instance, children in school are studying a variety of subjects like, chemistry, biology, math, and so on. All these subjects will provide them with the valuable information they need to be more successful in their future life. Students in school are trying to work hard to succeed in their education and consequently in their future career.
Socially, students in school have the opportunity to deals and communicate with different kinds of people. In school students are vulnerable to work with each others. Working in a group is a big challenge. For example, all the students in schools are assigned to work on the same project, or even do a presentation in front of the class. Some of the students may feel that working in group is hard in the beginning, but because they have to do it, they will be fine. Students will then deals with their friends. Students will have the ability to increase their social net work. Others will get rid of their stress and shyness. as we can see working hard in school will help student to overcome some problems, and have better success future.
in conclusion, for the reasons i mentioned above, I encouraged every one to work hard to have a better future. School would allow student to focus more on their education. Hard work in school will help students to overcome some problems they have. Consequently they will have better future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89655172414 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59401121308 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442528735632 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8963365133 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.0 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28856534267 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961701419862 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909910103224 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205439029724 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104002047819 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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