Art is a very important part of our lives. It expresses our creativity as well as it reflects our beauty and culture. Some people would agree that the company should support the arts. Others would disagree. In my view, the company should use that money to protect environment for two imperative reasons.
To begin with, there are many pollutants that we have action to reduce it. In advent of technology and progresses, a lot of harmful products are produced which have a negative effect on our ecosystem, so we have to manage the resources that add most of pollutants. In fact, cars are sources for gases that affect our health. In addition, plastics, which use them in most of our basis life, have a serious impact on our agriculture because they didn't decompose, and most companies try to buried deep in the ground that leads to affect the soil. All these introduce many problems to our existence and the nature.
Hence, in addition to the pollutants, because we need to wood to use them for building, most forsts are exhausted and leave the land without trees. When governments cut many trees and use their logs for building, a lot of animals will be affected because they destroy their habitats and decreas their reproduction. For example, I read an article about the importance the forests on the environment, the author assert that reduce in forest devastate to us since decrease in release of oxygen and increase carbon dioxide. He adds that also will increase endangered animals and if one species will extinct, this will lead to loss opportunity to save our existence. This book taught me that all we should encourage companies and orginaziation to take care of our planet.
By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I concur that this company Should use themoney to save our earth. Not does help to relieve poluttants, but it also save forests and animals from extinction which a veryhard task to reverse. All we should participate to protect and live in safe place.
there are many pollutants that we have action to reduce it
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most companies try to buried deep in the ground
most companies try to bury them deep in the ground
Not does help to relieve poluttants, but it also save forests and animals
Not only does it help to relieve pollutants, but it also save forests and animals
All we should participate to protect and live in safe place.
All we should participate to protect and live in a safe place.
All we should participate to protect and live in safe places.
Sentence: He adds that also will increase endangered animals and if one species will extinct, this will lead to loss opportunity to save our existence.
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Suggestion: Refer to will and extinct
Sentence: Hence, in addition to the pollutants, because we need to wood to use them for building, most forsts are exhausted and leave the land without trees.
Error: forsts Suggestion: forests
Sentence: When governments cut many trees and use their logs for building, a lot of animals will be affected because they destroy their habitats and decreas their reproduction.
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Sentence: This book taught me that all we should encourage companies and orginaziation to take care of our planet.
Error: orginaziation Suggestion: organization
Sentence: By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I concur that this company Should use themoney to save our earth.
Error: themoney Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Not does help to relieve poluttants, but it also save forests and animals from extinction which a veryhard task to reverse.
Error: poluttants Suggestion: pollutant
Error: veryhard Suggestion: very hard
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