The main purpose of universities and schools is to nurture and raise well educated students who will be qualified and helpful in the fields their country needs. Some believe that government should support univiersities and colleges finanically in sports and social acitivities rather than libraries. However, I have the opposite perspective and believe that universities and governments should consider more budget in improving libraries and classes as these will encourage student to continue their studies.
To start with, libraraies and classes should be funded to be abale to keep up with the advanced technology. Modern students need well-equipped callsroom classroom and libraries to be engaged in academy and lectures. If the libraries do not have modern computers and advanced ergonomic office chairs and tables, students might not be motivated enough. Take my univeristy's library, the Auchmuty Library located at Newcastle, as an example. Recently, the vice-president has considered $1 milllion to renovate the library. After months of renovation, now students have very spacious and modern facilities in the library. We even have a 24 hours un-staffed operating learning lounge which is equipped with the latest laptops and PCs. Student now come to the library significantly more than before. As this example shows, when libraries are sponsored, it will bring more student to be engaged in courses and learning.
In addition, libraries and classes needs more fund for the maintenance and operating costs. To provide a suitable environments which would be warm enough during winter and cool enough during summer, libraries should pay electriciy bills. Most of the libraries, specially in developed countries like Australia, are equipped with microwaves and hot waters. All these devices consume electricity. Without appropriate considered fund, libraries can not continue their services to the students and scholars. Furthermore, libraries should pay for the subscription to scientific journals and books annually which will add to their expenditures. For instance, to be able to download a paper from Chemical Engineering Journal, which is a well-known scientific journal, my university pay thousands of dollars in a year. It can be easily understood that post-graduate students might not come to the libraries if their date data base is not up-to-date. Finally, well-educated staff and knowledgebale professors might not be interseted in working in a uninversity if their salaries are not sufficient. Libraries require enough budget to keep their staff who organise books and assist student to find the most related resources. It can readily justified justify that universities should contribute enugh money to their libraries so they can pay their operating costs and their staff.
In conclusion, universities should consider more budget for libraries and callses classes compared to sports and social programmes, as the main objective of establishment of universities is to educate students. The libraries need enough fund to be able to service students and to have modern facilities and well-educated staff.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2657.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61733615222 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04810233811 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507399577167 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7635057109 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.708333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7083333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131602509683 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431532255033 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383044476546 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102059096928 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229373527518 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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