TPO 03: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In carrier of human's life, friends play a vital role and must be chosen with more accuracy. Tehy can help in tough situation, learn in crucial stage and guide you as your brother. In the life procedure, different kinds of friend can be taken. Some prefer to have new friends and change them in every period time, while some disagree. From my point of view, both of alternative can have their own advantageous or disadvantageous.

There are some people who prefer to keep their old friend rather than taking any new. They belive that old friend are living for along time and can be more trustable. This point can be enlighten in the situation that they want to do a secret job like the job that relates to their family or money. For instance, last week I saw a documentry on television that it was about how a person is trustable. The program shows that a person give his many to a friend to oay for his cheque payment. The old man's friend did this properly. So I can understand from that story that we can trust to old friend

There are another people who prefer to have some new friends at each time. They think that different people have different idea and this is a point which they really love. Learning is also another target for such a persons. For example, last week I read an article about new friend effects on peoples life style. The paper has such an importance that has been founded by University of Tehran. The article investigate a statistical comunit of 100 people. Different people's behavior was analyzed through psycologists too. the outcome of the study shows that people who want to learn more an get more experience always change their friends. Therefore, that article taaught me that some people have habit of changing their friend in a short time.

In sum, different people choose their friend in the way that they like. Some people needs friend to be more secure, so they rarely change them. But some other people love to learn more and have new exprience of new friend so, they always change them. I think It's only a kind of habit that people can have and Its beyond what ever we call good or bad.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54947916667 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30255315483 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502604166667 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.6465583589 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.7916666667 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143373725493 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463919267716 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414100982181 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095749127566 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246123000059 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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