TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Friends are the most important gift in our lives. They make our life more meaningful and enjoyable. The issue whether it is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends arouses much controversy among different people. some people contend that it is important to keep old friends because they are the ones who know us well and we share a lot of our memory ,sorrow,and happiness together.However, some people in favor of making new friends because they introduce us to the new world and help us in our current situations. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the latter one.

First of all, new friends will introduce us to a new world. They will change our look to the world as they will help us to explore new things such as different places, different cultures,or a new life style.when we make new friends ,they will open our eyes to those things that we never experienced before. By this way, they will help us to be more knowledgeable and well-rounded people. For example, when I moved to the US, I was not able to get accustomed to the new environment until i started to go outside and make new friends, everything becomes easier. New friends helped me to know more about the American culture, civilization, life style as well as they helped me to communicate with new Americans because they taught me the language of their country. In addition to that they helped me to find a job, apply for my children school, and even the transportation.As you can see, knowing new friends is ver important.

moreover, our life is full of unexpected situations.Therefore, we need to be in touch with people. What i mean is, when we face an obstacles or problems , we need the help of the people who are around us as in this time our old friends may be in another country. In this situation we need the assistance from the people who are close to us to help us to get through this problem. For instance, when i was preparing for my Fpgee exam, I added a lot of people on my facebook.Later on , these people became my new friends, they gave me a lot of hand tips about the exam as well as the materialss to study from.This experience demonstrates me the importance of having new friends.

Of course, old friends are very important to keep them in our lives because they are the ones whom we shared our beautiful memories. As an old saying'make new friends, but keep the old ones;those are silver, and these are gold' which reflects me the importance to keep in touch with our old friends even we made new ones.

To put it in anutshell, I am in favor to make new friends because they are not only introduce us to the new world;but also they help us to in our current situations. In the same time, we must keep our old friends because 'old is gold'.

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Average: 7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i mean', 'in addition', 'of course', 'such as', 'as well as', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20462633452 0.229887763892 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.144128113879 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104982206406 0.0866891130778 121% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0427046263345 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.129893238434 0.0685040099705 190% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.106761565836 0.118717715034 90% => OK
Participles: 0.00889679715302 0.0351676179071 25% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.75979202072 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0498220640569 0.0309702414327 161% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0747330960854 0.0887237588012 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0142348754448 0.0209618222197 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0160142348754 0.0139019557991 115% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2778.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 509.0 408.028673835 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45776031434 5.86048508987 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.259332023576 0.338922669872 77% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.216110019646 0.251872472559 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.133595284872 0.174417080927 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.104125736739 0.112833075102 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75979202072 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416502946955 0.524397521467 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.3967386775 59.2087087015 80% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.7894736842 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9759037468 48.84282405 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.210526316 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7894736842 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.54480286738 343% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.4004756488 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.01123595506 1.45489161554 70% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369275831878 0.300154397459 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.164587765087 0.103427244359 159% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104088385856 0.0752933317313 138% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.583519972288 0.497263757937 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.176356891162 0.151897553556 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172920443037 0.114077575197 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984864351122 0.0781384742642 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.448012125997 0.336927656856 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0623164228461 0.067059652881 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269531305577 0.210909579961 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751048654281 0.0618886996521 121% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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some people in favor of making new friends
some people are in favor of making new friends

Sentence: For instance, when i was preparing for my Fpgee exam, I added a lot of people on my facebook.Later on , these people became my new friends, they gave me a lot of hand tips about the exam as well as the materialss to study from.This experience demonstrates me the importance of having new friends.
Error: materialss Suggestion: materials

Sentence: To put it in anutshell, I am in favor to make new friends because they are not only introduce us to the new world;but also they help us to in our current situations.
Error: anutshell Suggestion: nutshell

flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Try to use less pronouns (like 'I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.

Don't put a space before punctuation marks.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2199 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.253 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.405 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.07 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.284 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5