TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I strongly agree with this statement that children should not be allowed to play computer games. The main thing is that they become addicted to playing games and put them apart from real worlds and surronded environments. In addition, it has pscycological effect on their character.

First and foremost, playing computer games affect children`s mindset. Moreover, games have a variety of disadvantage especialy for younger kids. They may become nervous, in the case of losing the violant game which plays for an hour. Then start fighting with their parent. Also, children could not learn how to communicate with others and find a friend. Therefore, they feel sense of loneliness and anxious about their situation. It will be effect on their health such as obesity, and vision disbility.

Second factor is that, some of them can have difficulty in concentrating their school`s lessons, because they would like to continue their playing. So, it has negative effects on their focusing of each invidual. For instance, our neighbor`s child has been playing games for several hours each day, and his mother complains about his social behviour. Moreover, he has not compeleted his final exams in fourth grade.

Third reason is that, children should been encouraged to practice the educational game instead of playing computer games. To give an example, I have started to learn Spanish language by using an application which shows the picture of diffrent things.

last but not least, children should learn a variety of important lesson from society and learn how to solve a solution. That`s why I highly recommend my children to avoid put a lot of effort on playing games. Also, Many developed countries banned usage of these games.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, third, apart from, for instance, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 281.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25266903915 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74557870106 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615658362989 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8838409909 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6842105263 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7894736842 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215214029412 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681006959734 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894809603314 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132523161702 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780817960817 0.0645574589148 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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