Allowing children to play computer games attracted much social concern. Different people possess different reasons for their different choices between allowing or not. Many parents state that it is necessary to forbid children to play computer games. Personally, I agree with this statement.
First and foremost, what I put in my priority is study affection. It is apparent that, playing computer games is a time-consuming activity. It steals time of children which should be used for studying, reading books, or doing home assignments. For that reason, children lack time for accumulating knowledge and revising older ones. As a result, they are not able to understand the lessons well and it leads to their poor results. More severely, computer games permission is likely to make children addicted. Being addicted to computer games, children are willing to skip classes in order to engage in it. This will be detrimental if occurs consecutively. Children’ performance in school will decline dramatically and this will make them even more dispirited and discourage them from studying. Hence, their schooling result will be a disaster. Indeed, by permitting children to play games in computer, their result in school will be very low.
In the second place, health problem is another essential factor contributing to this essence. It cannot be denied that; computer games allowance creates chances for children to become short-sighted. By sticking their eyes to the computer screen for a long period, children’ vision is defected severely. Therefore, their health will suffer and their life will be also affected. Moreover, children are prone to obesity when they are permissible for playing computer games. On account of sitting for a long time before the computer, children lack physical activities such as playing sport, go for a walk and so on. Lack of activities which activates body makes fat to be stored inside body which causes obesity. Not only being obese, work out shortage is able to create many other diseases, for instance, heart attack, etc. By and large, children’ health weaken if they are allowed to play games on PC.
Lastly, skill deterioration is what cannot be left out when considering the essence. It is widely known that, playing computer games blunts children’ communication skill. As they devote themselves to games, they don’t have time to interact with other people including friends, parents and so on. Because of lack of communication, their communication skill wanes and when the world is more and more connected and requires a person various skills, especially communication skill, this shortcoming is dangerous. More dangerously, playing games is likely to corrodes self-control skill of children. The games market is extremely broad and the games itself are very glamorous with high quality graphics, interesting contents which attract player so much. Players are able to play without noticing hungry, thirsty, tired. Moreover, violent games can infuse children’ behavior badly, can make them more aggressive or even to commit crime. With no doubt, by allowing children to play computer games, can their personal skill be ravaged.
In summary, study affection, health problem, skill deterioration are convincing reasons for my agreement. I highly recommend that parents should take my writing into great consideration to make an appropriate decision on allowing children to play computer games.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in summary, no doubt, such as, as a result, by and large, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2936.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45724907063 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91112960634 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513011152416 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 890.1 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3304542974 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8857142857 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3714285714 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77142857143 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 3.85842293907 467% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286464559987 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860681330214 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635098694478 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185571233155 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339276636974 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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