TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

The advent of technological improvement has brought so many benefits for people, allowing them to live their life in a better way. In my opinion, the internet is one of the greatest inventions of the century due to its ability to provides people with valuable information on a level never experienced before. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

Frist of all, the internet provides unlimited access to the well of human knowledge. Nowadays, people can find anything they interested in on the internet from simple cooking recipes to a delicate poem or even manual instruction to build a robot. From a point of view as a student, I found this especially useful for my study. For example, when I struggled with biology subject, I could simply type in a few words on the search engine and retrieved thousand of hits. By focus only on the relevant information, I found the answer that I needed. The internet is even more useful when I need to find references for my thesis. Instead of walking to a central library and borrowed piles of articles and books, I could easily use the search engine to find all the information and added them to my thesis. Without the help of the internet, the work that could be done in a few hours could cost me a month.

Secondly, the internet also helps people to connect with each other in a simple manner. There are a ton of options that ones could choose to communicate with others, including but not limited to chatting, voice calling or twitting. This reminds me of the time when I worked on the project with other friends on the class presentation. The biology professor of our class assign to each group to present about one specific topic. My group of five people chooses to present about the mechanism of how microorganism replicated. This topic requires a lot of studying materials from textbooks and articles and discussion among group members. Each member has different study schedule and hardly finding time for a proper discussion. Therefore, the only solution is to create the shared presentation file on the group account, save in the online storage and allow a group member to edit and modify the file with track-record. By using the internet, we are manage to finish the presentation without compromising other's study schedule.

In conclusion, I am the opinion that the internet has allowed people access to valuable information by providing the unlimited access to information and the flexibility to connect and communicate to each other.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...ords on the search engine and retrieved thousand of hits. By focus only on the relevant ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a simple manner" with adverb for "simple"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...helps people to connect with each other in a simple manner. There are a ton of options that ones c...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'managed'.
Suggestion: managed
...k-record. By using the internet, we are manage to finish the presentation without comp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8545034642 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76233711249 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521939953811 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8659664132 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.095238095 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.619047619 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218571399811 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624917218552 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559975165062 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145523211643 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420882961293 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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