TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

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TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Without a shadow of the doubt, access to the Internet is one of the important things that plays a vital role in social development and improvement. By these amount of information that available for us we can use them for our goals. Manny people contend that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information, while others assert it just creats problems. Both the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agrre that the Internet provides us preciouse data. In the ensuing lines, I delve into several reasons to substantiate my point.
First and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that hera are a lot of information in this space. All of the people around the world share their ideas and their findinf of their experiments with others. So, we can easily find what we want and use them. Furthermore, can be connected to each other in web sites like researchgate.com or linkedin.com. In these sites all the researchers gathered to speak with each other. For example, when I worked on my thesis I had a problem about finding a unique ingredient and finally one of my followings in researchgate.com helped me to obtain that ingredient. So, as you can see the Internet can be very beneficial. It not only is helpful but also creates opportunities for people to find new friends or even get a job.
Another point springing to mind is about creativity. In my opinion people who use the internet for solving their problems are smarter tahn other people. Interestingly, this recently was proved by researchers. Based on scienticts' opinion this subject means finding a correlation between being more creative and using the Internet was a complex issue that required a lot of studies with a broad spectrum of samples. A good study would take decades and finding people to take part was hard,but finally, researchers did it. The findings of this noteworthy study that conducted on 10000 people with different countries to avoid any bias demonstrated that people who use the Internet to solve their problems are more creative and smarter than other ones. So, as you can see it is better to people to use the Internet.
Although the said reason are the first ones cross to the mind, there is other thing that we have to consider it. There are many people who waste their time on the Internet. For example, they spend their time on playing games and other nonsense things. As you can see, the Internet has many disadvantages but I think we can ignor that because the advantages are more.
To sum it all up, by taking all the details into consideration it is easy to see the advantages of applying the Internet. People can share their information, can solve their problems, and also the Internet makes people smarter. I hope some day we can improve our knowledge about using the Internet well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...are a lot of information in this space. All of the people around the world share their ide...
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Line 2, column 608, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...om helped me to obtain that ingredient. So, as you can see the Internet can be very be...
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Line 2, column 670, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Internet can be very beneficial. It not only is helpful but also creates opportu...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...and finding people to take part was hard,but finally, researchers did it. The findin...
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Message: “So , as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e creative and smarter than other ones. So, as you can see it is better to people to u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for example, i think, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77045194869 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8452752673 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.25 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2659705547 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074567713318 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753497288436 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159512507122 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037047841354 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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