TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the process of urbanization, the concept of family has been changed. Different from that of past when the whole family live in a big house, now days more and more people move to the big advanced cities or even countries to have better opportunities and live separately of their family members geographically. Which mean extended family is not so many important.
First, now days against that of past, parents and their children and even children with each other have different in many faces such as feeding, vacation, study, job selecting and ... In the past extended families were so important and all person prefer to be with their family. Today people almost select their way without their family helping. They may even emigrant to other country or continent to study or finding good job.
Second, in the past family tried to provide money, job and marriage for their children and these support continued until next generations. so most of family were extended ones which grandparents, parents and children lived with each other without any unsatisfactory. Against what i said in the previous paragraph, today families haven't enough resources to support their children and encourage them to be independent and have their own businesses and only a few family can provide condition which all member bond together in a good space.
Finally, in the past people almost was simple and more emotion.They had stronger relate with their family member even their cousin. On the other hand there weren't so many media specially which cause people find friends and participate in social activities. As a result most persons spend their time with their families and preferred to have warm hard bond with their relations. Today, people prefer to be in a social group and find their own interests with people who are in same ideas and thinking manner so family and relation bonded aren't so strong. As a result having an extended family isn't so important.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... and even children with each other have many different in many faces such as feeding, vacation...
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Line 2, column 351, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...their way without their family helping. they may even emigrant to other country or c...
^^^^
Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...pport continued until next generations. so most of family were extended ones which...
^^
Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ithout any unsatisfactory. Against what i said in the previous paragraph, today f...
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Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
... the previous paragraph, today families havent enough resources to support their child...
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Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun family seems to be countable; consider using: 'few families'.
Suggestion: few families
...nd have their own businesses and only a few family can provide condition which all member ...
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Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...ople almost was simple and more emotion.They had stronger relate with their family m...
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Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...n their cousin. On the other hand there werent so many media specially which cause peo...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 541, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ng manner so family and relation bonded arent so strong. As a result having an extend...
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Line 4, column 558, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly and relation bonded arent so strong. As a result having an extended family isnt...
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Line 4, column 596, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
.... As a result having an extended family isnt so important.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, second, so, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00920245399 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53405205563 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521472392638 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2207420252 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.866666667 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135347731013 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614757725437 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356686950441 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996928009665 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120774919125 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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