TPO 14 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Essay topics:

TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Without a shadow of the doubt, travaling and spending time to go to different places play a vital role in the having a happy family. By going to travel we can let our family experience new things. Many people contend that human benefit more from traveling in their own country, while others assert traveling to foreign countries is a better idea. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that people benefit more from traveling to abroad. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount reason is that by going to a new country we can meat newpeople and new places. Consequently, we can learn about the history of the country and understand their culture. If we limit ourselves just to our home country, we may lose our chances to broaden our horizon. Furthermore, we can use from our new experiences in our personal lives. For example, last year I visited Istanbul city in Turkey. This city was very amazing, beautiful and full of tourists. One thing that impressed me very much was about planting flowers and trees in front of their houses. These green and colorful flowers had made the city pleasant. After I come back to my country, I plant some flowers to increase the beauty of my home. Eventully, I believe that traveling to foreign countries can benefit more in comparison with traveling in oyr countri.
Another point springing to mind is that by experiencing new places we can make new friends in all over the world. Actuaaay, by remaining just in our country we limit ourselves, but by going to other part of the world and knowing other people we can increase our chance to make friendship with new people. If we meat new people we can show our culture to them. So, there is a possibility that they come to our country and visit different places. Besides, by absorbing tourists in our country we can make money. In this way, our country have to build new hotels and airports and different places. So, people can occupy these new jobs. As you can see, by making friends and inviting them to our country we can make money.
To sum it all up, it is easy to see the advantages of traveling to different countries. Believe it or not, there are many benefits such as learning about their culture and their good habitats and using them in our real life, or making new friends that by default can lead to make money in our country. Traveling to new country is not only an amazing experience but also a good adventure. Finally, I hope someday all of us can visit all the countries that we like to go.

Votes
Average: 9 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nce to make friendship with new people. If we meat new people we can show our cult...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59100642398 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49363095183 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475374732334 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8890780284 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4074074074 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2962962963 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14814814815 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165904529218 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573844258771 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781096523241 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133504204083 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741736671987 0.0645574589148 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.