TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

Everyone has its own way to learn things that are important in life to make a better future and one of the things is to become responsible in life. But is it fine to let adults, children manage their own money at a young age? Well some people of the society think that it is not a good way to make them learn “how to be responsible” as they can get ruined. However, I believe that it is a good notion for the following reasons.

First, it is extremely important for children to know the value of money as to comprehend the lesson of responsibility. In most parts of the world children are provided with all the facilities and comfort by their parents and so they do not know the exact value of the luxury items that they are using. They are not aware of the fact that it is very difficult to earn money. This makes them carefree and so they start taking things for granted for example my fifteen year old son has all the luxuries at home. He spends a lot of money on buying unnecessary expensive things such as I phone, pay station etc. This really jolts me as to when will I be able to teach them the value of money and that how hard it is to earn it

Second, children should be taught how to save money as it is crucial for their future. In today’s modern world children are dependent completely on their parents for all their needs. But in future when they will have to survive on their own without the assistance of parents, it will be quite intricate. That is why, they should be given the knowledge of managing resources on their own. I can say this strongly because I have observed it, one of my friends father was very wealthy. So, when he died he left huge amount of money and property for his only son but as he never taught his son how to manage money, he flittered it all within few years and later he was broken financially. This incident taught me that it is essential to make children aware about the utilization and investment of money at a young age and to do so it requires that children should be given liberty to manage their money

To recapitulate, I would like to say that everything has its own advantages and drawbacks like there is a possibility that if children get the freedom to spend as per their wish then they might get spoiled also. On the other hand, it is worth talking risk if one can teach a child one of the important lessons of life as it will help him/her all life to grow and to have a secure future.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... their wish then they might get spoiled also. On the other hand, it is worth talking...
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Line 9, column 389, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fe to grow and to have a secure future.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'as to', 'for example', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.180555555556 0.229887763892 79% => OK
Verbs: 0.176587301587 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.093253968254 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0416666666667 0.046263068375 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.109126984127 0.0685040099705 159% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.125 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0257936507937 0.0351676179071 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43043674618 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0456349206349 0.0309702414327 147% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0714285714286 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0238095238095 0.0209618222197 114% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0178571428571 0.0139019557991 128% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2474.0 2387.08602151 104% => OK
No of words: 465.0 408.028673835 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32043010753 5.86048508987 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.247311827957 0.338922669872 73% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.167741935484 0.251872472559 67% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.113978494624 0.174417080927 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0666666666667 0.112833075102 59% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43043674618 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.4652820224 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 27.3529411765 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.1625331529 48.84282405 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.529411765 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3529411765 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.823529411765 0.644075263715 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 44.1271347249 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.01212121212 1.45489161554 70% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304715820112 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118749411599 0.103427244359 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.071201040448 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.510622670346 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145588860105 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130403188502 0.114077575197 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874551000173 0.0781384742642 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.449329855555 0.336927656856 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0713898296973 0.067059652881 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235180256847 0.210909579961 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508817839152 0.0618886996521 82% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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