TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Advertisement is nothing but a market a product to the buyers. Product companies who manufacture such products, are line up with marketing team to attract customers into buying their products. By that prevailing idea, most of the advertises make appealing and convincing advertisement that persuade people into that.

First and foremost, to sell any product or trade it in the market they need to be exposed in fair amount to the people. Their associated benefits, alluring effects and solutions to common problems are little exaggerated in advertisement to tempt the customer. Moreover, with the visual effects and editing processes on food products and other can be provoking to the mind. For instance, many fast food chain create advertisement with the greatly attractive food item. Usually that item is either made up so deliberately and meticulously so that viewer could be convinced or that clip is computerized. So, through that seller companies in creative ways market their product to pile up profit.

Secondly, some of the advertisers create a advertises taking the popular personality in the market. Generally, people tend to lure into the celebrity oriented piece of advertisement and get assured that specific personality could be using that product. Brainwashed by that cogent argument, most person willing to spend money on that product. For example, in beauty products or in cosmetics advertisements, company tie up with well known female celebrity to appear in the advertisement. However, it may be possible that products which are being advertised or represented beyond the one's belief can be meeting actual reality. Although, for most product companies it certainly is not the possible scenario.

Therefore, weighing up on agreement with the statement with the mentioned reason, advertisers hype about the product which they want to sell out with high profit margin and use many sort of artificial ways to manipulate audience’s mind. Hence, products in advertisement are made to perceive better than they actually are.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4125 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01091763421 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571875 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.47817057 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.882352941 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186309509198 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670967271283 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423022314997 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128863368278 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464776228269 0.0645574589148 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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