Every one have their own preferred way in advertising their products, and all of them have their own strength and weaknesses. I strongly believe that most advertisements make products look much better than the reality. Someone consciously weigh the pros and cons. The explanation go as follows.
To begin with, more sophisticated advertisements is a successful measure to attract customers, which is the base of every business. The fundamental stone in raising a powerful business is presented by the number of sales that it does. This is equal to the percentage of net worth, and thus can either raise businesses to the peak or otherwise drown it into deepest oceans. A food advertisement is an exceptional example of this. Mac Donald's uses plastic instruments in their advertising for their hamburger. They make the meal look beyond perfect in order to attract hungry people. Not only that, but also they get advantage of kids by advertising for "The Happy Meal" which includes a small inexpensive toy. The child now will start to demand to eat only at their restaurant, and that is the importance of advertising.
Furthermore, a good advertisement is salient to businesses to be financially successful. An increasing net growth means making more money. No one can argue that the primary aim of opening businesses is to make cash and credit. Money is the most strong factor that raise companies. By doing this, new locations would be opened in various locations. Each advertisement is targeted to a specific type of people, and thus they can act like magnet. Car companies is a good example to illustrate this point. Every car is advertised as a super powerful vehicle that looks much better than it is in reality. They make it look bigger, shinier and luxurious to make the most amount of money, and so expand their company name.
As a conclusion, good advertising is an essential factor to construct an exceptional business. Success is something that everyone aims to. Therefore, the importance of advertising should be appreciated more in order to raise and shine.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'Someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'weighs'.
Suggestion: weighs
...r than the reality. Someone consciously weigh the pros and cons. The explanation go a...
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'into the deepest'.
Suggestion: into the deepest
...esses to the peak or otherwise drown it into deepest oceans. A food advertisement is an exce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, thus, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0726744186 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99054164074 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561046511628 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5259168121 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.7083333333 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3333333333 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155415652268 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432592611087 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454028925026 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919397965847 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041257279193 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.53 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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