Nowadays, the competition for a good job is becoming more fiercer. Some people believe that it is more important to develop a better relationship with many people than studying hard at school. Admittedly, having a good social circle will bring you good fortune and can easily get help from other people when searching for a job. However, in my point of view, studying hard in school would definitely bring more benefits in the long run. It will equip us with good knowledge and new ideas.
To begin with, studying hard has a lot of benefits to you. By studying hard, your knowledge scope becomes much wider than others and even an expert in a field. Thus you are able to do works beyond other’s capability. In other words, studying hard is a way to enhance your capability. Also, studying hard contributes directly to success. Luxun, a famous Chinese litterateur, was once asked his secret of success. He answered "I was just studying while others were drinking coffee." Further, people always say “Chance favors only the prepared mind.” Most chances come once a lifetime. Studying hard is a good preparation for a coming chance. Also, your ability to learn new knowledge can be improved through studying. No one could deny the fact that the more you use your brain, the agiler your brain is. In nowadays society, knowledge updates fast. It is necessary to learn the latest knowledge as soon as possible. You can be more competitive when you master them before others do. Therefore, you are more likely to get success in your future job. A survey released recently by China Daily shows that 78.6% of 34000 employers prefer employees with strong abilities' of learning new things.
Secondly, although, the relationships among people do well for your success, they fail to take into account that an ignorant person will never get promoted. No one would like to introduce an incapable person to others, which also does no good for introduced himself. Take one of my classmates; Tom, for example, whose father is a CEO at a big company. He knows nothing about his father's company, and he is unwilling to learn knowledge. However, his father introduced Tom to that company, and he got a job. Since Tom is lacking in both learning and practical ability, he never gets promoted, let alone success. The relationship can only be an extra help for your success. It's a kind of chance in some degree, only prepared people can grasp it.
Finally, studying hard could yield more creative ideas which are important for future success. Apparently, the more efforts you paid, the better outcome you will get. One example immediately comes to my mind is the wealthiest man in the world--Bill Gates who is the former CEO of Microsoft company. It is well known to us that he spends most of his time in programming in school. After he dropped out of Harvard, he decided to start his own business. With the knowledge he has learned in school, he invented the Windows and other revolutionary products. Within years of efforts, the company finally becomes one of the most valuable companies in the world. It is no wonder that innovation often comes from hard study and plays an important role in business success.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that studying hard is a necessary step to your success, while the relationship is only a good chance to get promoted.
Essay evaluation report
becoming more fiercer.
becoming much fiercer.
Sentence: No one could deny the fact that the more you use your brain, the agiler your brain is.
Error: agiler Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 39 15
No. of Words: 582 350
No. of Characters: 2713 1500
No. of Different Words: 285 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.912 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.662 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.446 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.572 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.252 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.396 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays, the competition for a good job...
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Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'fiercer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: fiercer
... competition for a good job is becoming more fiercer. Some people believe that it is more im...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s with good knowledge and new ideas. To begin with, studying hard has a lot o...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...n others and even an expert in a field. Thus you are able to do works beyond other&a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...asked his secret of success. He answered 'I was just studying while others w...
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Line 3, column 835, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: Nowadays
...e your brain, the agiler your brain is. In nowadays society, knowledge updates fast. It is ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g abilities of learning new things. Secondly, although, the relationships am...
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Line 5, column 678, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...only be an extra help for your success. Its a kind of chance in some degree, only p...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., only prepared people can grasp it. Finally, studying hard could yield more ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... important role in business success. From what has been discussed above, we m...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'apparently', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'kind of', 'in other words', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216939078752 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.163447251114 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0965824665676 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0624071322437 0.046263068375 135% => OK
Pronouns: 0.074294205052 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105497771174 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0430906389302 0.0351676179071 123% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62713644271 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0282317979198 0.0309702414327 91% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0772659732541 0.0887237588012 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0208023774146 0.0209618222197 99% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0104011887073 0.0139019557991 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3442.0 2387.08602151 144% => OK
No of words: 581.0 408.028673835 142% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92426850258 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342512908778 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254733218589 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197934595525 0.174417080927 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10843373494 0.112833075102 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62713644271 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509466437177 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 63.1980284493 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 37.0 20.6684587814 179% => OK
Sentence length: 15.7027027027 20.5533526081 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7282372833 48.84282405 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.027027027 120.699889404 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7027027027 20.5533526081 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.486486486486 0.644075263715 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.1760245616 45.7405998639 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.21782178218 1.45489161554 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460511110027 0.300154397459 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0891953006977 0.103427244359 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0693720674174 0.0752933317313 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.376902541332 0.497263757937 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142791225402 0.151897553556 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135746645685 0.114077575197 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690325758373 0.0781384742642 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.311930840252 0.336927656856 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0373631611139 0.067059652881 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300878948054 0.210909579961 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569851000703 0.0618886996521 92% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8870967742 202% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 18.0 8.42114695341 214% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 27.0 13.6433691756 198% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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