TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

It is a controversial topic that how a person can success in his job. Human resource management studies advice many skills and abilities to promote in job. One issue that has been always debated is the priority between relation abilities or studying well in school and university. I think have a strong relationship with people is more efficient than being a hard-worker student.

First, Robbins is one of the most famous writers in field of management who has many reference book in universities. Based on his interviews with managers of companies seventy percent of them emphasize that networking and relating ability is the key success factor for their promotion in comparison with their knowledge. People in professional environment prefer to work with their group because of trust and loyalty and many times they neglect lack of knowledge of their team. So networking ability is more important than expertise in professional job.

In other point, industry and professional atmosphere is very different with academic one. Success in job has a strong correlation with experience and a potent background in school does not guarantee a person to be dominant in work. Hence the main tool to gather experience is relating with people and managers, having friendship with them, talking and knowing their mistakes. In fact there are many subjects at work that you can not find them in essays and academies.

Third, it is a fact that people first make connection with you then accept your knowledge. If you fail in connecting with your coworkers you will not dominate with your skills and knowledge. For example one aspect of promotion in a job is getting managerial position in a company and people just accept and obey a person as their leader in case of having good relationship however how his knowledge is vast or not.

In conclusion, in any industry having a good connection with colleagues is primary rule in comparison to being a expert in your field and achievements could be achieved in this way.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
...ities to promote in job. One issue that has been always debated is the priority between relatio...
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Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...rantee a person to be dominant in work. Hence the main tool to gather experience is r...
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Line 9, column 112, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... is primary rule in comparison to being a expert in your field and achievements c...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, so, then, third, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03293413174 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83314701438 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52994011976 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2402872863 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0625 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248513132894 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873106772916 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499420799307 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138521163868 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636258207209 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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