TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

Teenage, word itself reveals that the age generation lying from the age of eleven to nineteen. This age is the developing age of the human life which comprises some aspects of maturity like adults and some kiddish characteristics. This is the transition phase from the childish character towards the maturity. Basically teenage reveals and creates ladder to climb successful platform. Additional responsibility like part time job can creates hiccups in the developing stage. According to my opinion, parents should not encourage their teenage children towards part-time job.
What is the main task of a teenage children? I guess study and build career. How can a immature teen can bear the additional pressure of job? It is very harsh to put additional responsibility of job in the age of learning. Part-time job will disturb directly or indirectly in the age of learning. Tuning of human cycle is proper and well decided to act suitably in a proper stage. Teenage is to learn and to develop, not to work as a job. Teenage children should focus mainly on the study to build solid future and part-time should be utilized to relax. This world is full of competition and pressure. Long stretching schools are consuming half of a day time of children and even giving home task with so much precision. There is no scope of getting free time for jobs.
It has been observed that some teenage children divert their attentions from the study and focus more on the attractive inventions like play stations, internet. They adopt bad habits of enjoying in play zone, wasting time on the social sites. Obviously, they are cutting their time from the study and wasting time in these activities. It is good to engage them in some additional activities like part-time job so that at least they would not go towards the devastation. Part-time job for teenagers will also supports financially for the family as well as experience will also help for future jobs.
Finally, it depends on the condition how we see teenage children. Part-time job should not create resistance in the channel of study which will assure for better future. It is always advisable to engage teenagers in some additional tasks like part-time job if they are misusing their time and opportunity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 417, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...latform. Additional responsibility like part time job can creates hiccups in the developi...
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Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'create'
Suggestion: create
...l responsibility like part time job can creates hiccups in the developing stage. Accord...
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Line 2, column 36, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'child'?
Suggestion: child
...ob. What is the main task of a teenage children? I guess study and build career. How ca...
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Line 2, column 85, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...I guess study and build career. How can a immature teen can bear the additional ...
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Line 2, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a immature teen can bear the additional pressure of job? It is very harsh to put...
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Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'support'
Suggestion: support
.... Part-time job for teenagers will also supports financially for the family as well as e...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'at least', 'i guess', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260975609756 0.229887763892 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.153658536585 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0926829268293 0.0866891130778 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0487804878049 0.046263068375 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0439024390244 0.0685040099705 64% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129268292683 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0365853658537 0.0351676179071 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71388989141 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0292682926829 0.0309702414327 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.090243902439 0.0887237588012 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0292682926829 0.0209618222197 140% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121951219512 0.0139019557991 88% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2253.0 2387.08602151 94% => OK
No of words: 378.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.96031746032 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349206349206 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272486772487 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195767195767 0.174417080927 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.145502645503 0.112833075102 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71388989141 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502645502646 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 54.119063488 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.12 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5078205975 48.84282405 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.12 120.699889404 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.12 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.32 0.644075263715 50% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 42.3686772487 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.73267326733 1.45489161554 119% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400919094746 0.300154397459 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107921652689 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0899098994492 0.0752933317313 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.442882522887 0.497263757937 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.106099927679 0.151897553556 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143629386737 0.114077575197 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482825752126 0.0781384742642 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.445261130911 0.336927656856 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0585339410157 0.067059652881 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284320646621 0.210909579961 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516451467516 0.0618886996521 83% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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