TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

We confront various stages in life. While passing through various stages, some believe that parents should help teenagers to take part time job so they can be prepared well to deal their adult life. I agree with the above presented opinion due to several reason I will be providing below.

First, As we take part in certain type of job, we increase our experience level. Suppose, children are encourage to do various type of job like taking care of car, providing service at restaurant, rendering aid to older people. With such experience, we can easily accomplice any related task if he confront during his adult life. When I, for instance, was at high school, I was also doing a part time job at waiter. During that period, I learned how to behave with people, how to soothe irascible costumer and also, deal with problem in case of mishandling of food items. Till now, these skills are providing me ease while I confront such problem such as mollifying an angry person, dealing with certain endeavor. Similarly, it also help to recognize our aim to be in adult so people will not have any dissatisfaction about their chosen career. While doing part time job in child, since it is not a permanent job, we do many kinds of job, making us know about which type of job we like. My cousin, like me, used to do part time job, but he was irresolute about which career he should pursue in future. One day, he went to a job as handling a report in a Clinic. When doing a job, he was so fascinated by his job that he choose to be a medical student as his future career.

Second, I believe is the money management, a major key that affect our adult life. If we do part time job from early period of life, basically,we will know about a value of money and second, we will become independent in certain trivial financial issue such as pocket money, buying our clothes. As we become accustomed to it, we will feel reluctant to ask money from our parent rather we will be focusing on saving our earned money and using it only for justified purpose. Therefore, such habit will help us during our adult life while managing our money because more we become older, more will be things in which we have to spend money.

Third, learning about responsibility may be another ground. Suppose, if a child is given to do a job from the beginning, then he will also learn that careless in doing those job will cause undesirable consequences. you can take an example of my friend Samjhana. During high school, she was assigned to do a stall ward at a parking lot, but due her negligence, one car was missing. As a result, she was charged high. Now, she is very demanding while doing her duty, she said that her one mistake has provided her a meaningful lesson. But if we do mistake while we are an adult, we may not have a time or opportunity to amend it; thus, realizing about value to responsibility in time may also lead to successful adult life.

Finally, due to aforementioned reason, not only parents but also society should encourage teenager to participate in part time job. The major factor which is required for successful adult life is provided by experience during the involvement of job at early age- dealing experience, money management, realization of duty.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...t parents should help teenagers to take part time job so they can be prepared well to dea...
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Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...job so they can be prepared well to deal their adult life. I agree with the above...
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Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...with the above presented opinion due to several reason I will be providing below. First, As...
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Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...experience level. Suppose, children are encourage to do various type of job like taking c...
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Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
... level. Suppose, children are encourage to do various type of job like taking care of...
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Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'confronts'.
Suggestion: confronts
...asily accomplice any related task if he confront during his adult life. When I, for inst...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
... was at high school, I was also doing a part time job at waiter. During that period, I le...
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Line 3, column 734, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...th certain endeavor. Similarly, it also help to recognize our aim to be in adult so ...
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Line 3, column 838, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to career'
Suggestion: to career
... any dissatisfaction about their chosen career. While doing part time job in child, si...
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Line 3, column 858, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
... about their chosen career. While doing part time job in child, since it is not a permane...
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Line 3, column 935, Rule ID: MANY_KINDS_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'jobs'?
Suggestion: jobs
...ot a permanent job, we do many kinds of job, making us know about which type of job...
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Suggestion: part-time
...we like. My cousin, like me, used to do part time job, but he was irresolute about which ...
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Line 3, column 1092, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ute about which career he should pursue in future. One day, he went to a job as handling ...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
...ey that affect our adult life. If we do part time job from early period of life, basicall...
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Suggestion: , we
...job from early period of life, basically,we will know about a value of money and se...
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...d, we will become independent in certain trivial financial issue such as pocket m...
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Suggestion: You
...ob will cause undesirable consequences. you can take an example of my friend Samjha...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...t a parking lot, but due her negligence, one car was missing. As a result, she wa...
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Line 9, column 118, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ld encourage teenager to participate in part time job. The major factor which is required...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, similarly, so, then, therefore, third, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2678.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 582.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60137457045 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56205560192 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46735395189 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0397926049 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1851851852 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03703703704 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259587802716 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079820846671 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557762094496 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168400154715 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579437038455 0.0645574589148 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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