TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

No one can deny the fact that knowledge taught at school is not sufficient for us to survive in modern society. In adult life, one needs to own money by himself or herself, and needs to know how to communicate with different kinds of people. Many of the skills required can not be taught at school, and thus can not be learnt in classrooms. So having a part-time job can teach the youngsters how to be financially independent and how to get along with others.

First and foremost, one of the biggest challenges young adults face is to feed themselves and to manage their fortune. Clearly schools can only teach knowledge, and the use of knowledge to earn money can only be learned by practice. By having a part-time job, not only can they experience the hardship to make a living by their own hands, but also they are able to learn how to spend their income reasonably.

Secondly, taking a part-time job can teach the youngsters how to deal with others. Student meet friends and teachers on campus everyday, but we should remember that the relationship between people in school is different from that in society. During part-time work, teenagers can meet different sorts of people, thus picking up some skills on how to get along with others in an equal and friendly way. This is highly valuable for their further development in adulthood.

Nonetheless, one might contend that taking a part-time job is likely to distract teenagers from their study at school. Indeed, doing so can interfere with one's study at some level, but it does not necessarily mean that students must totally be barred from work in part-time. It is exactly when parents are expected to offer guidance and surveillance. What is more, the students can also learn to arrange their time and to find a balance between study and work at the same time.

For the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe part-time job should be encouraged when teenage children are preparing for adult live, as long as it is overlooked by parents.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ent meet friends and teachers on campus everyday, but we should remember that the relati...
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Line 7, column 156, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ol. Indeed, doing so can interfere with ones study at some level, but it does not ne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, thus, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80057803468 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63815845799 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523121387283 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4864755514 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.8125 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286887193054 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997486359241 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569505481194 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171635069724 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313081700877 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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