TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

Both the reading and the article are about a 70-million- year old fossil of Tyramnosaurs rex (T.rex), a dinosaur which probably contains relics of the actual tissue of the animal. The a group of scientists represented by the author of the reading are inclined to the idea that these remains are for the actual tissue animal. On the other hand, other scientists, represented by the professor, provide many reasons to dispute every claim made in the reading.

First issue of dispute is the soft, flexible substance inside the bones` channels. The professor points out that these substance are not remains of blood vessels. He says that it possible that they are residues of bacteria that usually lives behind the traces of minerals. This cast doubt on the first claim made in the reading.

Second point of dispute is the spheres that found in the animals`s bones. The lecturer explains that since the same residues has been found in a prime animals that does not have red blood cells, these spheres are most likely to be just residues of minerals. Because of this the professor thinks that the second explanation in the reading is not accurate.

Another point of dispute is the collagen found in the bones. The lecturer put forth the idea that the collagen can not last more than a 100 thousands of years. Therefore, it can not be found in a 70- million- year old fossil of an animal. Moreover, it is possible that the collagen is belongs to one of the researchers who handle the bones. Because of this the professor refuse to accept the third claim made in the reading.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'The' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: The; A
...ics of the actual tissue of the animal. The a group of scientists represented by the ...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this substance' or 'these substances'?
Suggestion: this substance; these substances
...channels. The professor points out that these substance are not remains of blood vessels. He sa...
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Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'animal'?
Suggestion: animal
...same residues has been found in a prime animals that does not have red blood cells, the...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...likely to be just residues of minerals. Because of this the professor thinks that the s...
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Line 8, column 137, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '100 thousand'.
Suggestion: 100 thousand
...t the collagen can not last more than a 100 thousands of years. Therefore, it can not be found i...
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Line 8, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in a 70- million- year old fossil of an animal. Moreover, it is possible that th...
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Line 8, column 343, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f the researchers who handle the bones. Because of this the professor refuse to accept ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1314.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 274.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79562043796 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51427805104 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 212.727598566 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474452554745 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 402.3 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4397293438 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0247566439425 0.236089414692 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00851990879414 0.076458572812 11% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0121369307975 0.0737576698707 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0142614038099 0.150856017488 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149019571913 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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