The majority of people who are in their early to mid-twenties think that today today’s young people are not trying to take enough time to help their communities. They support that people in modern society are likely to be selfish. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be though about in a different light. I believe that today’s young people are trying to take enough time to help their communities. This is because they should spend their time with voluntary service and it allows them to broaden their perspectives.
First of all, trying to take enough time to help communities are requirements for people to get a good jobs. To be specific, companies in their society requires people with voluntary mindset. As modern society is becoming increasingly competitive, people are likely to be selfish and thinking only themselves. People can do this better by doing volunteer service. Today’s leading recruiters prefer people who had enough time to help their communities. Recruiters show such a tendency because people who had enough time to help their communities tend to be more creative and active. In the long-run, creative and active thinking abilities enhance people’s work performance which results in job promotions. This proves that young people should have enough time to help their communities in order to enter better jobs.
Moreover, trying to take enough time to help communities enables young people to broaden their perspectives. Interestingly, it has been a topic on various social network websites such as Tweeter which people hold different opinions. Initially I thought that young people tend to do not give enough time to helping their communities. However, after reading relevant tweet feeds, I realized that people would not broaden their perspective when they do not have enough time to help their communities. This is because today’s young people do not have opportunities to meet actively with other people unless do activities to help their communities. For example, few years ago, my two sons do not like to communicate with others in person, which was my concern. Thus, I forced them to enter the community and help them many time. From that time, they became be active and well-cooperated with others. I realized that participating in communities makes people to broaden their perspectives and be more active. As a result, today’s young people should try to take enough time to help their communities in order to broaden their perspectives.
To sum up, I believe that in today’s globalized world, people do give enough time to helping their communities because they are able to get good jobs and broaden their perspectives. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, this trend will probably continue for the next generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 818, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...em to enter the community and help them many time. From that time, they became be active ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.226860254083 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.192377495463 0.158761421928 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0980036297641 0.0866891130778 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0399274047187 0.046263068375 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0762250453721 0.0685040099705 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0925589836661 0.118717715034 78% => OK
Participles: 0.02722323049 0.0351676179071 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91310785311 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0617059891107 0.0309702414327 199% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00181488203267 0.00188951952338 96% => OK
Determiners: 0.0399274047187 0.0887237588012 45% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.016333938294 0.0209618222197 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127041742287 0.0139019557991 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2945.0 2387.08602151 123% => OK
No of words: 477.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17400419287 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.379454926625 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247379454927 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171907756813 0.174417080927 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125786163522 0.112833075102 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91310785311 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408805031447 0.524397521467 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.5379710676 59.2087087015 77% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.3461538462 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6673434096 48.84282405 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.269230769 120.699889404 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3461538462 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 43.0840993388 45.7405998639 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.12352941176 1.45489161554 77% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387017037133 0.300154397459 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.137507936634 0.103427244359 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.121689390162 0.0752933317313 162% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.498693566647 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166600952548 0.151897553556 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165929926984 0.114077575197 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094151695801 0.0781384742642 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.573407798587 0.336927656856 170% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.103495028168 0.067059652881 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300093041133 0.210909579961 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579028998466 0.0618886996521 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.