TPO-26: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Upon starting college, children will start contemplating about preferable subjects with great job outlooks. Many of these may feel the urge, or in some cases pressure, to follow in the steps of their parent so they can pursue the family business in the years to come. Although there can be many great benefits for children to continue the business run by their family, or just simply enroll in a job similar to that of their parents, such as the passed on experience and laid groundwork, I am not very fond of this. Some of the reasons for my disapproval are elaborated below.
First and for most, I think by encouraging children to follow in the footsteps of their parents, their own interests and independence might be dismissed. For example, a potential artist might never get discovered just because he/she had to go through medical school to pursue the practice of his/her parent or a great novelist might be dismissed as he/she takes on the duties of the family company. This could lead to a constant sense of dissatisfaction and lack of independence, which could affect one’s productivity and success in the undesired job. Although, not all these children are actually forced to pursue their parents’ careers, many might feel they have no other options simply because they have not been familiarized with other avenues for their future.
Also, unhealthy competition which could in turn lead to tension between family members is a sure output of this endeavor in many families. If, for example there are several children and a big family company, how will it be decided that who will be the CEO? These situations can lead to pressure and rivalry between siblings which can later damage their relationship with one another. Also, there can be pressure on the child enrolling in a job similar to that of a parent to fill his/her parent’s shoe, meet the expectations and excel beyond the parent. By and large, I believe this course of action might have deep impact on the children and family members, leading to anxiety and tension.
In general, I think although enrolling in a business familiar to the child might seem intriguing at first, there are many potential disadvantages that come from it. Nevertheless, I think the final decision should of course be made by the child to consider if he/she would like to embark on the career of his/her parents, or pursue his/her own dreams. But parents should be aware not to pressure their children, both evidently and passively, into following their steps by informing them of the various majors and careers they can embark on.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 517, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...groundwork, I am not very fond of this. Some of the reasons for my disapproval are elaborat...
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Line 2, column 649, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much might', 'a good deal of might'.
Suggestion: much might; a good deal of might
... to pursue their parents' careers, many might feel they have no other options simply ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, for example, i think, in general, of course, such as, by and large, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92922374429 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68665202073 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506849315068 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.7836514276 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.9375 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24637292197 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833254455814 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646941907813 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1605473294 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057117043471 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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