TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

Nowadays, it became so important to choose the right jobs that fulfill your needs on all aspects. I agree that children should choose jobs similar to their parents. I will explore the reasons for my choice in the following essay.

First of all, parents can help their kids in their study to be professional in their career. If children chose the same career, they will have educational help if they faced difficulties in their study. Moreover, the parents could convey their long experience to their sons and daughters. As a result, the new generation of the family is likely to progress in their career much faster. That is because they can get feedback and advice whenever they need from loving parents. For instance, If you look at the famous business men around the world, you will find that many of them have taught their kids how to run the company. Therefore, these companies keep its success and growth because the new young managers, sons or daughters, have gained good experience directly from the older members in the family.

Another noticeable reason is that children are likely to save effort and money when they choose they same career of their parents. If the whole family has the same area of interest, that will give the children a lot of available resources more easily. So, if one of your family is a doctor, you will definitely find a big library of medical books at your disposal in your home. Therefor, you do not need to search or pay money for new books. A close friend of mine is a compelling example of this. He studies in the medicine college, and in the same time his parents are doctors. Thus, he does not need to buy any books because every thing is available for him in his parents library.

To sum up, I support the idea of choosing jobs alike to our parents' jobs. This because it will enhance our chances of being more successful and professional. Besides, it will save a lot of effort and money since all the need resources will be available.

Votes
Average: 6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, as a result, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64488636364 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39060600989 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.356012584 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.75 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241635586609 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796403884955 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908437822923 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162870420082 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841378696224 0.0645574589148 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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