TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

Sometimes, we may a interesting phenomenon that a majority members of a family choose the same jobs. For example, the family Bernoulli had a great contribution in the field of mathematics. Here raises the question: is it better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to ones that are totally different from their parents' job? As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of this statement. Several reasons will support my standing while two will suffice here.

To begin with, parents can lend help to their children if they choose the same jobs as their parents. As we all know, experience is one of the most important thing in one's career success, which will also cost a lot of time and effort for someone the gain. However, there is no doubt that parents are selfless and willing to help their children with whatever they could provide. If a child can get the valuable experience from his parents, then he could save a lot of time and lead in his peers. And this is possible only when the child choose similar jobs as his parents. Taking Bernoulli for example, I am sure that senior Bernoulli has a great influence on junior Bernoulli, who built his great achievement based upon the exploration of his father.

For another, parents are the best role models in their children's growth. Many children firstly construct their concept of the word job based their parents' jobs and they tend to regard these jobs as scared and be proud of it. With this intuitive sense of belonging, children would consider these jobs as some kind of missions or heritages from their parents. For this reason, I believe children will treat them more serious than other jobs that have nothing to do with their parents' jobs. For example, as we always see in a movie, the son of a policeman would be inherit his father sense of justice and hate against crimes, and it is more possible for him to be a good policeman since he regards this job as an honor to his father.

Admittedly, a best choice of job depends on a lot of other factors like personal interests, education background and so on. However, when we narrow down the scope and only compare the jobs that are similar to or totally different from parents' jobs, the former one makes more sense and it is more possible for child to success in.

For the reasons we mention above, I think this statement aligns more with my personal perspective.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e is one of the most important thing in ones career success, which will also cost a ...
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Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... an honor to his father. Admittedly, a best choice of job depends on a lot of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, i think, kind of, no doubt, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62937062937 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42827797513 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482517482517 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.388475287 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.526315789 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5789473684 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398411092301 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139135385653 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144830139603 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223816220496 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108962028302 0.0645574589148 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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