TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

One of the youths’ concern has been finding proper job. People have continued their parents’ jobs commonly in the past, but nowadays, choosing suitable job is affected by many factors. In my point of view, continuing parents’ jobs depends on individually and society conditions. However, I believe that selecting job in different with parents’ jobs has advantages out weight the disadvantages in compare with continuing their jobs. Following reasons and examples prove my approach.

One of the primary reasons is that tendency and interest play essential role in choosing good job which guarantee people’s future based on salary, convenience, and so on. If you like your work and chose it according to your interest, undoubted you will get more success. Also working individually, without any depending to parents will increase your self-confidence. For example, my friend’s father is a famous doctor and has been work in one of the big hospitals in my city. . If my friend had continued her father’s work, she would have reached many facilities and would have employed very easily, but my friend decided to study in graphic major instead of continue her father’s work. She loves her work now and is one of the best graphist not only in the city, even in the country.

There is also a more subtle point we must consider. I think job variety between members of family led to enhance level of knowledge among the family. Everyone earn experience and skill about special works, which they like them, So they can share their knowledge with each other and help together in many directions. For instance, in my family, my parents are architecture and my brother is history researcher. Last year I needed chose my university major, I could use my family’s perspective and their advice in these two different jobs and finally I has elected archeology major which has relation with architect and history.

All in all, if all the factors are contemplated, we can reach a conclusion that both of the choosing parents’ jobs or else can be beneficial for everyone, the only important thing is doing work interesting and getting self-confidence, whether this work be similar with parents work or not.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... these two different jobs and finally I has elected archeology major which has rela...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252314814815 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.152777777778 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0717592592593 0.0866891130778 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0439814814815 0.046263068375 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0833333333333 0.0685040099705 122% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104166666667 0.118717715034 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0578703703704 0.0351676179071 165% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99785901883 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00925925925926 0.0309702414327 30% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00231481481481 0.00188951952338 123% => OK
Determiners: 0.0486111111111 0.0887237588012 55% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0208333333333 0.0209618222197 99% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00694444444444 0.0139019557991 50% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2203.0 2387.08602151 92% => OK
No of words: 359.0 408.028673835 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.1364902507 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342618384401 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.300835654596 0.251872472559 119% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.206128133705 0.174417080927 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144846796657 0.112833075102 128% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99785901883 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593314763231 0.524397521467 113% => OK
Word variations: 69.2055007814 59.2087087015 117% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9444444444 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.6572960205 48.84282405 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.388888889 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9444444444 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 50.0280099041 45.7405998639 109% => OK
Elegance: 1.47933884298 1.45489161554 102% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2687690952 0.300154397459 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0812348211505 0.103427244359 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0810771986664 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.453960572486 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.220269555048 0.151897553556 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967758655489 0.114077575197 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822610781189 0.0781384742642 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.261307239803 0.336927656856 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0833362161727 0.067059652881 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194580581078 0.210909579961 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727886587799 0.0618886996521 118% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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