TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

Nowadays having a good job is very important to most of the people, particularly for teenagers. They want to find a suitable position and by this way support their future. As a result, it often determines our level of success. The question is that should children continue their parents' job to reach prosperous? Different people may have different ideas about this but in my point of view, I think that they could be more successful if select their parents' job. I have lots of good reasons for my opinion but the most important of them are: they could maintain their family's job and also they have more chance to progress.
First and foremost, children could keep their parent's job by choosing that to work. Some old works gradually are destroying due to fewer people are interested their family's job. Also, this has bad effects on our culture because some works are an identification of a city or country. For example several years ago Tabriz had the important role in the world carpet industry but how about now. My mother was one of the people who was working in this job but due to lack of supports from people and government now she doesn't work. So children and young people should try to continue their parents' job and advertise this works to keep health culture of city or country.
On the other hand, children who want to choose parents' job, they have more chance to progress because during years spaciously they have earned precious skill and information about that work. They don't need to pass some practical courses like others who want work that career. Sometimes young persons claims that this work isn't good for this situation due to new services have been made. They could update and apply improved machines and technologies to attract people. This way could be the secret of prosperous for children who keep their valuable family's job.
As a conclusion, although some people agree with being the difference between parents and children's job, I believe choosing parents work is the more good option. Not only we could keep our cultures, also it causes to have more chances to progress. Don't you think we feel relax in our parents' own store and work?

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'i think', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240786240786 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.162162162162 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0933660933661 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0540540540541 0.046263068375 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0810810810811 0.0685040099705 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0958230958231 0.118717715034 81% => OK
Participles: 0.02457002457 0.0351676179071 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.35567445282 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.039312039312 0.0309702414327 127% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0737100737101 0.0887237588012 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.022113022113 0.0209618222197 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.014742014742 0.0139019557991 106% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2166.0 2387.08602151 91% => OK
No of words: 376.0 408.028673835 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76063829787 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.30585106383 0.338922669872 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239361702128 0.251872472559 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148936170213 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0797872340426 0.112833075102 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35567445282 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505319148936 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 54.4225796638 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8 20.5533526081 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3802204629 48.84282405 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.3 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 20.5533526081 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 42.7361702128 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.21487603306 1.45489161554 84% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29311495489 0.300154397459 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.093167343091 0.103427244359 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0739523324986 0.0752933317313 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.461841317285 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122876396129 0.151897553556 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116076877227 0.114077575197 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656670195434 0.0781384742642 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.348905054813 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0672885434792 0.067059652881 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207879961634 0.210909579961 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281064107055 0.0618886996521 45% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.