TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an argument which is as old as the world whether children ought to look for a job which matches with occupation of their parents or it is wiser to take a job position in a completely different field. Although many people support the second viewpoint, I am prone to buttress the first prospect. The reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in detail below.
Firstly, this is an indispensable opportunity for saving money on education. Education is expensive in particular when we have a deal with a professional one. Students have to spend money heavily on textbooks, equipment and other stuff which is needed for studying. At the same time, if a person’s parents have already studied at the same field they will have all required materials. Consequently, the lucky student may avoid spending finances on them.
Secondly, parents may help their offspring with acquiring knowledge in a chosen field. Studying may be quite challenging especially if a person picked a difficult specialization, sometimes the troubles faced by the youngsters may be so dire and challenging that a person could simply give up on it. In fact, in such fields as physics, medicine, engineering a number of students who manage to finish the studying process is relatively small in comparison with the number of people who enrolled. Parents may help their offspring with understanding of difficult concepts and studying challenging subjects. Thus, those students are less prone to be dismissed.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow a person to state that pursuing a profession which has no connection with the parents’ one is more beneficial. Chiefly, the person may aver that those children might exercise a freedom of choice and thus they are more satisfied and happy with their lives. However, I still affirm my viewpoint because choosing of a future job is always influenced by occupation of our predecessors. We may try to avoid repeating their fate or to continue their path in both cases an ancestor does not exercise a free will because unconsciously the one makes the decision with the respect to his and family experience. Additionally to it, there is no obvious connection between rejecting the work occupation of parents and satisfaction or happiness with the job taken. Therefore, the idea stated by my adversary isn’t sound.
To wrap up, following steps of your parents and picking a job which is similar to their one has many benefits for the offspring which were described above. Thus, I adhere to this idea completely.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2077 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.899 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.817 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.854 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.497 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...ng with acquiring knowledge in a chosen field. Studying may be quite challenging espe...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
...aver that those children might exercise a freedom of choice and thus they are more satisf...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 658, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...e respect to his and family experience. Additionally to it, there is no obvious connection b...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, in fact, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08510638298 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95003066961 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543735224586 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9701353547 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.428571429 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243915142472 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662240089183 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725501157527 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14103865515 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631303683781 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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