TPO 26
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that since the dawn of civilization, the job has played a prevailing role in every individual's life. The most controversial part of this issue is jobs for new employees. The inevitable question which has invariably engendered heat debated among academicians is whether it is better for children to choose jobs similar to their parents' job or they opt so different from their parent's job. Therefore, a plethora of people are the leading components of the claim that childrens must have different job from their fathers. Whereas others hold exact opposite perspective and believe that it is so logic that children chose jobs that are similar to fathers' work. I am, nonetheless to first convention, inclined toward the opinion that kids should choose the job that is similar to the parents' duty. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs will aptly elucidate a cursory glance at the outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it is very significant that a person chose a job which he is familiar with it. Parent have abundant experience in their job and white their hairs in this way. (They have a lot of experience.) On the other hands, children are amatour in their field of works; may be they attain some information especially theoretical data in their major. Had they chose jobs which are similar to their parents', new employees work better in their field because of parents' experience. For a personal experience as an example, my parents especially my father help me a lot in choosing the major and jobs. He is a professor in University of Isfahan, and has a lot of experience in teaching. He said me tactics of teaching, increasing the patient during the work,etc., so that I learn a lot of approaches for teaching; although, I am only 21 years old.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that successfulness in these children is higher than others. They can readily get the sense of satisfication through attaining more money because they learn the way of making money via their parents. The noteworthy statistic, revealed by a recent social research conducted in two persons, shows that the one who has a job that is similar to his father's job is happier and is more satisfied in his life than the other one who has a different job from his parents' job. So the latter person not only doesn't have adequate money for daily life but also can't create the sense of happiness for his family.
To recapitulate, all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that it is a good advise that children opt works that are similar to their parents' jobs. However, that was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are some other reasons and examples, challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above. Finally, it is suggested that a survey is conducted to find out whether people have experienced valuable by choosing a fathers' job or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...d choose the job that is similar to the parents duty. To substantiate my point of view,...
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...y glance at the outstanding reasons. The first exquisite point to be mentione...
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...en are amatour in their field of works; may be they attain some information especially...
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Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'chosen'.
Suggestion: chosen
...eoretical data in their major. Had they chose jobs which are similar to their parents...
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...ents job. So the latter person not only doesnt have adequate money for daily life but ...
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... adequate money for daily life but also cant create the sense of happiness for his f...
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... sense of happiness for his family. To recapitulate, all the enumerated reas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, whereas, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2425.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86947791165 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77870801024 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491967871486 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5700618548 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.227272727 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436609166877 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123403262118 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112048880383 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272025739278 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103734450011 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.