TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Nowadays, having an appropriate job has played a prominent roles in human's lives. Despite the fact that some people prefer to have a satisfying job, others, on the other hand, prefer to take a secure job. Personally, I adhere with the people who try to find a secure job. In the following paragraphs, I mentioned two conspicuous reasons.
To begin with, there is no doubt that people who have a secure job, can improve their experience and have a precious chance to find a good job. In other words, people every day deal with by their job and spend their time to promote their resume, hence, they have a good opportunity to find a better job in the future. In contrast, people who waiting for a satisfying job, waste their time for the sake of finding a favorite job in the institutes and job seeker place. To illustrate my point, my brother has a secure job and recently, one of the well-known companies called him in order to get an interview, after the interview, he said that the most important aspect of your resume is your experience to get an appropriate job. Consequently, dealing with a secure job not only can reduce your financial problem but significantly the highlight your resume.
It goes with saying that have a secure job for people who are interested in, relieve the emotional feelings such as anxious, stress and blood pressure. There is no exaggeration to say that people who have a secure job, are so calm and peace. As a matter of fact, they have less problem than people who wait for a satisfying job because of proper source of money and ability to provide a primary products. So, they have good relationship with their family and their colleagues. A noteworthy research in three well-known universities of Australia states that people who have secure job, have a longer longevity. In contrast, people who do not have any job, they deal with a blood pressure or critical stress because of challenging many dilemmas such as monetary problem. Therefore, without doubt, secure job has many positive effects such as emotional feeling.
To wrap it up, by considering all the aforementioned reasons, I aver that people who have a secure job, feeling better in their lives, therefore, are more successful and have opportunity to find a better job because of proper experience. In opposite side, people who wait for a satisfying job, suffer from emotionally disease such as high stress and blood pressure.

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Average: 6.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'product'?
Suggestion: product
... money and ability to provide a primary products. So, they have good relationship with t...
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Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'noteworthy research'.
Suggestion: Noteworthy research
...with their family and their colleagues. A noteworthy research in three well-known universities of Aus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, so, therefore, well, in contrast, no doubt, such as, as a matter of fact, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82014388489 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73027243496 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467625899281 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.790086284 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.666666667 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315922516508 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130774785956 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439249434809 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227210340994 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215249619908 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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