TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

There is no deny that with the fierce competition, more and more people are looking for a job. Thus whether choose a secure job right away or wait for a more satisfying one is really a heat debate. In my point of view, getting a job right away is better for the following reasons.

To begin with, with the fierce competition of looking for jobs, it is unwise to give up any chance you have. Even though it may not seem like your dream job, a secure job at least supports you enough salary to live by yourself. On the contrary, waiting alone means you have to depend on parents and no one makes sure that you will have the best job. For example, my brother, Li first got a job as an officer which in most people’s opinion is a secure job. To our surprise, he gave up and still hoped to a better one, however, two years were wasted without any better jobs. The reality is truly cruel and it is possible that your dream will never come true thus if there’s any chance, you must try to get it or you may regret it forever.

Moreover, one can totally get promotion at work and then one's job is getting more satisfying. There is no doubt that it is hard working that can make you success, not waiting. I will still take Li as an example. When he finally accepted the job as an officer, not like most people who wasted time on pleasure, he concentrated all on his work. Soon he was awarded and he became a minister which in fact even he never dreamed of. Just by hard working, you can own the chance of a satisfying job.

Admittedly, sometimes there will be more chances if you wait, however, how can you make sure the next is better? The fact is that you just cost your time without any repayment.

To sum up, considering all the above appoints we can draw a conclusion that getting a job right away is better than waiting.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... and more people are looking for a job. Thus whether choose a secure job right away ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, thus, at least, for example, in fact, no doubt, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3083573487 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31656913083 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521613832853 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1318840219 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.0555555556 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2777777778 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292413434143 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102365114096 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677450611304 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176079852446 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803192634556 0.0645574589148 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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