TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Life is changing every day in all aspects due to a variety of factors. Different perspectives of change have different effects on the quality of our lives, ranging between very positive changes to very devastating. However, education is one of those important diversion aspects especially with parents becoming more alert to the reflection of this process on their children's life. So, I strongly agree that parents today are more involved in their children's education compared to parents in the past.

The first most important reason for that would be the fact that parents nowadays are more educated themselves. This means that those young parents are clearly aware of how education can alter their children's life and make it way better and much sophisticated. Education can guarantee a life with a better career, higher pay, and a socially more open individual that is able to face any obstacle in his life. I will give an example on that from my personal life. Now, let's compare my parents Vs my grandparents and the difference in how both had raised their children. My dad attended a very far school away from our village. His parents did not even know what he was studying and whether he was succeeding or not. Moreover, they never asked him about any grade or a project score. Similarly, my mom was in a similar situation. But fortunately, both of my parents got educated and finished their higher graduate studies. On the other hand, the way I was raised was totally different. I had an educated and very strong parents. So, they raised me on the concept of the importance to be educated as well. They were highly involved in my journey. They asked about my grades almost every day, and that motivated me to achieve more and work harder, just because they cared. So, I wanted to graduate and reach the peak with my education to make them proud of who I am.

A second important reason would be the hard times that parents went through themselves in their own journey. Nowadays, the importance of education financially in the working field is becoming the base to a good decent life. No one now can find a great job and be able to live a good life with being not educated. Because life now is getting harder and our necessities are becoming wider, being educated with an important degree is essential to survive. For example, an ignorant uneducated individual can only get little money that would not be enough to cover his needs. Whereby, a highly educated doctor or professor would have his own house, expensive car, and maybe would take his family to an annual vacation. I am sure that this is what every one dreams of.

As a conclusion, parents are now aware of the importance of their children to be highly educated in order to live the life that they had always dreamt of, that is why they are very involved now. Both parents and children are very aware of what education can introduce to them as a person and to their pockets

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, similarly, so, well, as to, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2430.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7001934236 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53297635832 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471953578337 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7625532643 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7931034483 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8275862069 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65517241379 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206743047381 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637099816796 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790129322272 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149647251211 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562822323822 0.0645574589148 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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