TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I have not yet able to form my own family now when I am twenty eight years old. However, I have seen parents of my age pay more attention to education than my parents did. From my experience, I think that parents nowadays involve more in their children's education than before. I believe this phenomenon happened because of these following reasons.

First of all, contemporary parents have more free time to focus on education of their children than before. People live in last century have to spend most of time in a day to work for food and other life necessities, which are scarce during that time because of the lack of technology and science. Consequently, parents of the past ignore the importance of their childrne's education. By contrast, people nowadays are liberated from arduous work for a basic living and they own more leisure time than before. Therefore, some parents devote their free time in supporting and promoting education of their children. Parents nowadays frequently ask about performance of their children in school and contact with teachers.

Moreover, the importance of education urges parents to involve more in education of their children. In contemporary era education plays an important role in an individual's life. The level of education influences a person in work, living community and life quality. Without question, every parent want their children to lead a easy and happy life with decent remuneration in a friendly environment. Thus, parents endeavor to achieve this goal by providing better education for their children and involve more in the academic life of their children. My parents once told me that they would sell house for my tuition fee in university if they have to, because they want to support my education and wish me to live a better life than them.

In summary, I agree with the view that parents nowadays devote more time and effort in the education of their children than before. One reason is that parents own more leisure time in contemporary than before, and another reason is that the desire to help children to live a high quality life drives parents to intend and support education of their children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...education plays an important role in an individuals life. The level of education influences...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...very parent want their children to lead a easy and happy life with decent remuner...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, i think, in summary, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98347107438 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64684824166 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462809917355 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3254585852 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320050718947 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136363823533 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949877023805 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235653355647 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473016392595 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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